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Days of Decline
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Days of Decline |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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For two I love... one human, one feline. Days of Decline I trim your hair Brushing soft fur and shave your face I hear your purr as if loving care But you are leaving Could postpone acceptance I choke with grief of the invitation for all that was death has issued and will never be again But baths and fresh clothes Beauty is but memory Are cosmetic improvements Your faltering steps It’s a good day Have forgotten play When no accidents occur Frail and demanding Clinging and irascible I’m never enough You’re not who you were But you are mine I ask you to Plead that you stay fill each moment with memories for when they're all that's left |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You did this so well, so smoothly... an intricate weaving of two loved individuals, bringing them together in your heart. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ruth Very touching! Loved the format...it worked well with this.  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Suthern, this is masterfully penned, not too mention how filled with love it is. *hugs*.....jo |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
suthern, Yes! Masterfully done. You make it look so easy, but I'm sure it isn't! Your comparisons are vivid, drawing me in. Take care, beautiful lady. miscellanea |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Beautiful and loving write.... I like how you structured this. Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." A. Brink |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh dear me |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I read this earlier, and it made me cry so I didn't reply just then, but I wanted you to know, it touched me... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Laura...I'm glad you decided to post this. You go to such deep places, and take us there with no purpose other than to share them....no posing, no motives, merely sharing part of yourself. I like that very much. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I had read this earlier too... it touched me deeply, yes |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
mirroring poems...reflecting two lives that are mirroring one another...and then in turn reflecting your heart. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Laura, a message many of us still need to learn, I, for one, first in line. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Decline? It's days of REcline ya want! Go do that for a while, eh? Then pick up those problems and they'll be lighter. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
This was wonderful. The way it was written, the weave of emotion, the depth of expression, the reminder of the sad reality that we are all only here for awhile. Bravo! SG |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Belle, not only were you able to convey your deep love for them, you were also able to celebrate their lives in a most compassionate and loving way. ~ an intricate weave to this fine piece of poetic tapestry. Sending loving, healing hugs, Linda |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthernGal~ Compassionately penned with so much love and true feeling~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ratleader: Thanks for those grins, my friend... I love the thought, even if days of RE-cline are but a dream! *S* And thank you for assuring me this was worth posting... I thank you all for your incredibly kind responses... they mean so much to me. This is very real... and your comments make me feel less inadequate... Thank you... so much. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Dear suthern gal, this is such a loving poem, to and from the heart. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
The clock ticks louder here, too, m'friend. love you lady |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Awesome work, very well done! maybe after a bit of practice, I could attempt something so truly ambitious adagio |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Blues: Thank you so much, sweet lady. *S* serenity: Gets to where that's all you can hear, doesn't it? *S* Thank you... and {{{{{HUGS}}}}} adagio: Folks like Ratleader make it look so easy... but I knew better. *G* So the only reason I tried this form is that I couldn't get either verse to consent to being second. *G* Thank you so much!! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Beloved one, finally I get the chance to reply to this soft weaving of wonder. You know beloved that this touched me so very deeply, I can almost see the two slipping softly away into the light. YOU are a wonder and your strength, your ability to paint the picture with this delicate and interweaving of such amazing depth and warmth is unsurpassed. I truly love this beautiful layering of memories your presented here, and I promise I will make the most of what i have while i have it. and forever Mushy  Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
a most wonderful write and one that I can relate to especially this week... (My cat Sugar, hasn't eaten in days no matter what I try to give her..so it is a waiting game again) thank you the format made the words even more touching M |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Marsha: I love you, lady... thank you. *S* And I know you will... you always do... and help me to do so, also. *S* nakdthoughts: One of the hardest things is... whereever I am, one of them's left feeling neglected... Big hugs for you and Sugar... Thank you! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Clever format and the words are wonderful! Eric |
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