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Goodknight
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0 posted 2005-06-14 07:43 PM

Skipping through maybes
Wavering huhs
Seldom said nothing
Time rends fate
Teeth set on edge
Heavy sighs cry night
The tear lost itself
The frown grasped a lie
Whispers called my name
But I didn’t understand
Sounds left no beat
Drums were silent
Yet mouths moved whispers
Fate peered away
Fear dripped and ears cleared
Whispers heard fearful lies
Soft sounds drew near
Deep thoughts
Left doubts

Martie

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1 posted 2005-06-14 08:24 PM

Paul....this was like skipping with words...made me almost out of breath. I enjoyed the dichotomy of some of your lines...like, "whispers called my name", and "Drums were silent". Very interesting poem!

bslicker

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state of mind

2 posted 2005-06-14 08:32 PM

enjoyed
bernie

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passing shadows
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3 posted 2005-06-14 08:32 PM

well crafted...I do relate to this

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

4 posted 2005-06-14 08:42 PM

Very well done Paul..
Good to see you posting again!

Hugs~Nancy

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dancing with you in the summer rain~

Ratleader

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5 posted 2005-06-14 09:02 PM

I like this! MORE!MORE!MORE!

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6 posted 2005-06-15 12:45 PM

very nice

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above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

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USA

7 posted 2005-06-16 01:37 PM

Great write, Paul. You really captured the feel.

...jo

Startime55
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since 2003-04-05

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8 posted 2005-06-16 01:47 PM

Your words have captured feeling that all have felt at one time or another...Wonderful writing that hits the nail on the head...*hugs*

Cloud 9
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since 2004-11-05

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9 posted 2005-06-16 04:38 PM

I enjoyed this as well.

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

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OH

10 posted 2005-06-17 11:12 AM

Paul,

    Wow!

    "Skipping through maybes
    Wavering huhs"

    Astounding, it's as if you hold a  crystal ball...

    And then this and everything in-between!

    "Soft sounds drew near
     Deep thoughts
     Left doubts"

It's great to see you posting again.

                  miscellanea

Justbleu
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11 posted 2005-06-17 02:10 PM

I loved the way I skipped right along with you....

Very nice!!!!

Bridgette

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