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when the timing is off
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when the timing is off |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia 
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Stir the pots and scrub the spots from linens soiled stand up and spin summer is in and rhyme means nothing when the timing is off so what if silence IS just silence? it still hurts like hell when it comes from you who knew? the rainbow still rises after rain washes blue skies and even jaded eyes will open to gaze upon ephemeral beauties ~the rose knows~ scents of love’s caress await the wondering nose but who knows where rainbow colors might lay themselves down within bands of love on a brilliant sunny day? |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Even upon a first quick read this poem stirs a feeling of awe deep inside, dear Kacy. A keeper. ... for our human awareness the timing may be off, but the Now holds everything. The song and the silence, the blooming rose and the falling petals. Thank you dear Kacy, this is a beauty. Love, Margherita  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 thank you Margherita, for your lovely thoughtful reply |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"the rainbow still rises after rain washes blue skies and even jaded eyes will open to gaze upon ephemeral beauties" This is it, this is the answer....all things are ephmeral..including beauty, if viewed in the physical...But in oneness all things remain constant...The rainbow always rises, even when the skies clear...but the eyes of the jaded, most times, cannot see it, even though it is still there... Poems such as these are a paradoxical (sp?) I love to read them enjoyed ----------ice/ford ><> |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
thanks, Ford and the original line read "jaded eyes might open" so you read me well  should I have left it as 'might'? |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Kacy "jaded eyes might open" does look better...imo Sheesh! I think I read it that way in the first place... Sometimes my brain moves ahead too fast I guess... Nice work.... -----------ice/ford ><> |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
The type of silence you describe does ache, dear friend. silence screams when it's the voice of absent love. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Kacy, I deem this a  ! You surely must know by now, that I'm a big fan of your natural metaphors!  Linda |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
complex intriguing Enjoyed! And agreed, silence from the one you loved is a special kind of "hollow" hell and the emptiness burns so hot! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
yep..silence does scream, sister Serenity thanks for that vote of confidence, Linda and dear wandering glider...have I ever told you I love that pen name? thanks for reading and offering your feedback |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Hi Kacy! Well, the timing "may" be off...but this poem sure isn't. Library awaits its arrival. ......jo |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
hey, thanks Jo! good to see you here, have missed you |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
yay, after the thunderstorm is over, the rays of light will illuminate and it's time to go out and live! nice message of optimism and hope. sometimes, that's all we need to carry on... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Oh yes, silence does scream, far more loudly than anything else...particularly when the silence is something we wish not to have or experience... Nice Seeing you! thanx for the pic! |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Sometimes I am at a loss for words...this is such an occasion. I don't know what to say...believe me if I could say anything it would be positive...don't worry. Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
a nod in understanding on how loud silence can be..... I keep a fragrance bottle my |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
you guys always make me smile, even when my timing and rhyming is horrid |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
The rainbow colors lie themselves quietly among coneflower and ash. A refraction of light sends their souls, screaming and sometimes, if you listen closely you can hear them singing. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
timing... is everything they say.. nicely done m'friend... it comes from someplace deeper...and sits well on the page.. I enjoyed |
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