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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
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0 posted 2005-06-02 06:29 AM



it was the silken hound
that clawed the door
leaving ribbons
of loud
where the eyes had been
folded hands

she runs wild now
with her skin behind
like a jacket
when summer dances
and forgetful is the song
noted by note

I wonder of her eyes
do they see the cellophane
of her languid
as it paints the sky
over dot to dot stars
and when comes the dawn

will she just look like more water


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dark

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1 posted 2005-06-02 07:38 AM


I love this. It reads like a lucid voyage.
Gentle Spirit
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2 posted 2005-06-02 08:10 AM


wow D, this is one of your best evers..
indeed, what will she look like come the morning when the light reflects upon her...

This is one of your more remarkable writes babe.  Good morning California!

I really want to care,
I want to feel something,
let me dig a little deeper
nah, still nothing~
my give a DAMN is busted. Jodee

Sunshine
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3 posted 2005-06-02 08:14 AM


...she runs wild now
...when summer dances...

you left behind
some visual glory
as you sailed away
on her tresses...

good morning, DS...


Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2005-06-02 09:50 AM


thank you ladies
for the eyes here

D

LeeJ
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5 posted 2005-06-02 03:18 PM


sigh
babygirlwlove
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6 posted 2005-06-03 07:26 AM


and forgetful is the song
noted by note


hell yes.  that's niiiice~

**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Martie
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7 posted 2005-06-03 10:25 AM


DS

"I wonder of her eyes
do they see the cellophane
of her languid
as it paints the sky
over dot to dot stars
and when comes the dawn

will she just look like more water"

If you paint her with your words, she will be gorgeous!



Cloud 9
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8 posted 2005-06-03 04:03 PM


Excellent as always.
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