Open Poetry #35 |
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Random Rhymes in a Meterless Void |
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Balladeer
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When the last word is written and the last breath taken will I be called an icon of my time by my peers, a master of rhyme, well-suited to be saluted in coffee house tributes adored by the masses with college classes dissecting my works and future poets looking back while murmuring "Now, THERE was a poet!" Will anthologies be incomplete without my brilliance represented and will my strong resiliance inspire others to reach their highest potential, essential necessity for those striving to be known as poet? Will there be a poem of mine or couplet or even one single line in which the entire world will know as well as their own name? Will that be my claim to fame as The Raven relates to Poe will there be some work of mine they will know belongs to me or some second line that will spring into being by hearing the first, some automatic burst of recognition such as "A poem as lovely as a tree"? Will I become a statue in the park where passers will say 'he led by example' and trample manicured lawns to get a closer look at me? Will my base be chipped by critic diamond-bit quips and turned into a billboard underscored by brush strokes bold and defiant trumpeting the exploits of Crypts and Bloods and Bill loves Tina forever? Will pigeons find my head a perfect place for nesting as bird dung falls, resting on lips that once drank wine and sang of knights, crusades, promises kept, mistakes made in folly of youth, now silenced by the truth of the grave? Or will I be nothing more than a stone on the ocean floor, polished clean by the motion of unending movements of the tides where all that resides are other invertebrae like me, out of view from a humanity that doesn't care and never did, hidden in blues from those who look but do not see the me there lying in the sea. Should a child find me on the shore and fling me out to count the skips one, two , three, four before turning away in disinterest will I feel the foam envelope me and know that I am home? |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Poignant as always, Balladeer, and raised the deep-seated hopes, fears, and dreams of all who take up pen, brush, chisel, charcoal...all who create something from nothing. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Balladeer, my friend. You are a wonderful poet. And have always been a great inspiration to me. I will always remember you. Your poems have always been such a joy to read. Thank you for sharing them. |
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MGROVES![]() ![]()
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
yes you shall be remembered, enjoyed this one~ i never really thought much about that, but now ya got me thinkin ![]() My spirit will rise |
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Kit McCallum
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Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Well now ... I see you've taken my challenge of wanting to "sneek in rhymes" into free-verse and made it absolutely spectacular. Is there nothing you cannot do, Michael? ![]() Truly, this flows beautifully, and the rhymes come into just the perfect places to make me sit back and simply say ... you are brilliant! ![]() PS, you WILL be remembered sweet poet. Of that ... I have no question. ![]() Beautifully written, Michael. ![]() Best wishes and big hugs, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Excerpt... quote: With the exception of the pigeons, the answer is, Yes. You will most certainly be known as Poet. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
...Saved faster than you can say, "Poe-et"! ![]() My goodness, that was brill! With a poem like that, I don't think you have to concern yourself with the last stanza! The first two, definitely apply to you, Deer One! ![]() Linda |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Inspired and profound. A poet..and remembered. I shall never skip stones again without thinking of your words. believe in what your heart feels... |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Dear Mike, Yes you will be remembered by all who like me have printed out your words and put them into a three ringed notebook, to take out and share and discuss. Your Small Pain in My Side still hangs and is being read each day. Your wonderful work, Treblinka still hangs, I hope, in the museum. I know the one I gave it to, with your permission, has passed it on to her teacher daughter who shares it with her students every year as they study the Holocaust. So if they do not remember your name, I know they will always remember your words. best to you, martyjo |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
I will remember you How could I not! Remember your rhyme perfectly written with little dots of love and humor woven into stanzas of cadenced lines How could I not remember! Your words of rhyme, in time have touched so many as they continuously touch my heart my soul Tell me, how then, could I not remember you my friend! ![]() Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Great ponderings of a true poet! You can be everything, a poet is limitless by definition. Beyond, beyond ... and further still ... Love, Margherita ![]() |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
how could anyone forget you? especially your serious side...man can you ever write when you get sad! As far as the whole world, I don't know. You are here and that's all that matters in my world. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Michael This really touched to that place in me that ponders these same questions. As for the ocean floor, I may be there to keep you company. Wouldn't that be fun? and pssst...I have your book...one day years from now it may be found within my special belongings and someone will say, "wow"!! ![]() |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
His BOOK? What book? How do I find one. marty |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Deer.....Hi! No one here will ever forget you. Rest assured. This was a wonderful piece of work.....as are you! ![]() |
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Balladeer
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Alicat...right you are. When we leave our footprints on the sands of time, will there be more there than just a heel? smartchick...you can be sure I'll always remember you, too. You are a very special friend and you will always have a friend in me. MGROVES...when a poem can get someone thinkin', that's as good as it can get. Thank you... Kit...you will be remembered, too, my friend. We have a date in the next life, don't forget ![]() Sunshine...you can really hit a guy where he lives and I ain't talking about Florida! That would be my choice. Thank you... Earth Angel...well, live a long time so that I can remain alive in your favorites. I like it there!! scorpio....thank you. I prefer you thoughts over Toerag's, who said he would never GET stoned without thinking of my words!! I appreciate it... Martyjo...you have been such a pleasure to know and I appreciate very much all you have done in supporting me and spreading my work. You are a treasure and I thank you more than you know ![]() Titia....and how could I ever forget my crazy Dutchie who dances in the moonlight around the pool, gets little red spots on her cheeks when embarrassed, who giggles like a little girl, pigtails flying behind her when something strikes her fancy, who takes pictures of clouds and names sheep after poets...how? We are stuck with our memories, knuffel lady, and that's fine with me! Margherita...limitless by definition - well said!!! I like it! Thank you, miss.. Passing shadows...your world is good enough for me and I'll have to get sad so I can write some better stuff soon!! My thanks for all of your support over the years, Dixie.. Martie...as long as they don't say "Wow! How lucky to find this since I'm out of toilet paper!!!" ![]() I'd love to have you next to me on the ocean floor....anywhere with you would rock!! Marty..check you e-mail iliana...that's really a sweet thing to say. I appreciate you.... |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Mike, I read this earlier this evening and do so like the flavor. I do believe you will always be known and remembered and carry the coveted title of "poet"... |
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Balladeer
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Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you, Barry....may the "e" never drop for either of us! ![]() |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ah now 'there's a poet' a poet that never fails to make me smile...I did need to read you today ![]() |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
'Deer...YOU are indeed a poet!! AND...nobody does it better...n-o-b-o-d-y!! ![]() Hugs~Nancy ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Balladeer
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jellybeans...putting a smile on your face is important to me...thank you! ![]() Nancy...you are always such a wonderful supporter....I APPRECIATE you! ![]() |
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