»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #35
»
my poem of no name
| Open Poetry #35 |
|
my poem of no name |
|
Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
|
light is sky the river light color of sanded grass this flare orange burning feet turn wing try to fly bask or shrivel from blastheat in the glow this is Earth of the burning river daring you to live to live a creature creature of the heat waits waiting redemption in redemption in a bucket of stars velvet cliffs or flailing like of moonlight a burned fish understanding could be on the stringer fatal do not try to understand or cause breathng ship rocks are sand pause not wait ing to lest ye fall fall |
||
| © Copyright 2005 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I've developed a bad habit (or good, depending on your point of view!)...I write mostly in notebooks now, and when I do, I just open it at random and start to write. Well and good, except that sometimes I will find a poem written months before and forgotten completely....like this one, an experiment in dual voice that is perhaps a year old. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: Bless that habit! I liked all THREE voices in this one! |
||
|
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
outstanding! |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed Beautiful images...I can just see your mind's eye traveling with you, and making little marks in your notebook. Loved this!  |
||
|
iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"redemption in a bucket of stars" RatL, that one line was worth the read in itself. Very interesting perspective. Saving to read again. *hugs*.....jo |
||
|
suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Good habit, wonderful habit, please don't ever lose that notebook habit that gifts us with such treasures! *S* I've been working on a poem that thinks it needs to be dual voice... and my floundering has given me even greater admiration for what you achieve and how you make it seem effortless. *S* This may have been forgotten and may be nameless... but it's timeless... and superb! |
||
|
Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
At least you keep them. Never lose them, my friend. This is exceptional. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
||
|
inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
a treasure chest of word witicisms |
||
|
Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Ed...I'm so confussed LOL Enjoyed the dual roll. Perhaps a good title would be " The One That Got Away "...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
