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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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The night sky is filled with dying gods And soon, stars will become merely stars Orion, once proud hunter, is slender as his bow As unstrung and aimless His famous belt is looped twice around his waist He has gone hungry and is gaunt The seven sisters have become skeletal as well They huddle close, their lips are stilled Their flesh has blown swirling into dust Mercury, flightless, no longer bears a message His feet have been plucked clean of feathers He has nowhere to go Phobos and Deimos, themselves fading Are attending Mars, dressing him for the pyre His sword, rusted and dulled, has been sheathed And Venus, still lovely, even at the end Has long ago, stepped from her temple She resides now, in the memories of old men [This message has been edited by wranx (05-25-2005 11:07 AM).] |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Bravo! Well said, Sir Poet. |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Yes ... that's exactly the nostalgia we hang onto as we age and no doubt the contellations and great gods of the past feel it too. Well done. never try to teach a pig to sing |
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Aleta Member
since 2005-04-17
Posts 102Louisiana |
A distinguished life, endless with dreams as many as the stars… yet your poem depicts characteristics of aging in something we think would never die ~ The heavens, where we place our hopes. Sad write, well done. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang what a write |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx A delight to read. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Wow, delightfully dressed in humble yet, powerful images, what a way to describe Orion  Bravo |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read  |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
double dang! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
FANTASTIC WRITE!! Well said poet Sir. Life is one great big canvas; |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed....as the others, I am impressed with the way you write, again and again! Bravo! |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
A sad write....and well described. I wonder if I feel as they do. Hmmm... Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." A. Brink |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
wranx, Although this may not be the theme, I am reminded of the light pollution around the rural area where I grew up. Fondly, I remember standing out in the yard with my father, talking about the constellations. Progress now is at the doorway, and lights dim the brilliance of the night sky. It seems there is more sparkle in watering eyes than the stars... I so miss the breathtaking night skies! Fortunately, they are still there if one is a night owl--just have to wait for the streetlights to go to bed in the wee hours of the morning. Very much enjoyed this, wranx. miscellanea |
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youcan'tseeme Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 88 |
a bucket full of meloncholy was poured over top of me and then the bucket was placed over top of my head. this poem captured me. i'm beginning to see that your writing is fairly amazing. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Enjoyed this. Sends new thoughts and ideas to me. The skys over central Florida are clear and the stars beam brightly.I will be out side looking up more often now, hoping to entice Venus back for you. martyjo |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
That is why it is up to poets and dreamers to revive the imagination, the wonder, the mystery of the Universe, of life. There perhaps we may see the rebirth of Venus, before she perishes in the minds of old men...there Mars returns, sword drawn, shining, with razor edge... Imagination and wonder, the antidote to reductionism... Perhaps knowing all...also removes the mystery and the wonder of it all... CG |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You have a stellar talent ~ and mind! There is more than a hint of genius in this write!  Love & Star Light, Linda |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wranx, a bitter-sweet blend of beautiful sadness. Thank you for this  Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close...and keep my promises... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
My goodness you are amazing...God I miss you Ed. Adding this to my library. E me eh?  Mxx "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
excellent |
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