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A Beachy Day (working title)
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A Beachy Day (working title) |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Beachy Day I search for him from the cliffs, my toes daring silt to take me. Wind forces me back; my hair briefly forms into a twister. I spot him: face-down on a towel with a blue-and-yellow Corona logo. A Styrofoam cooler sits nearby. Clucking my tongue in distaste, I wander down the switchback; sunblind. He appears to be asleep; his back baked medium-rare – tenderized meat dotted by pits. I jab one sharpened toenail into his ribs and watch him jump. He frowns up at me, the right side of his face terry-lined, wisps of hair salt-licked. Guttural noises emit from his throat. I ignore him and sit on sand. Heat sears through my shorts. He knocks off the cooler’s top, grabs two beers, proffers one. I reject it, selecting an ice cube instead. I draw its liquid into my mouth. He watches. Hot. Yes. It is. He rolls toward me with growing interest. Waves explode onto jutting rocks. Far off, two dogs bark. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Seems more like the start of a "peachy" day. I, for one, would like to see where this would go. (yeah, I know, I'm a fine one to talk) Though, as it is, its a very nice write |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
You paint pictures with your words and with those pictures draw your reader into the emotions. I enjoyed the journey. never try to teach a pig to sing |
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VBallNut Member
since 2003-02-12
Posts 60Virginia, USA |
I'd like to see where this one goes, as well! Sounds like a fun & interesting day. Wish it were close to beachy days here, but it seems that Mother Nature is playing evil tricks on us by keeping the cold weather around longer than she should. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
enjoyed the read |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne I think I know where this one goes. LOL |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hot. Yes. It is. Ummm... very. Smiling here... more, please.  |
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