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Sunshine
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0 posted 2005-05-20 10:34 PM





I’s storm

Caught me up, this did
between God’s Valley of Trees
for it was some devil caught in mire
on my right, his angered countenance glaring
when my footstep took a first layer of cloud
as stage, hold, steady, break, free…
putting it behind me…

as his chest heaved and rattled, breaking in the wind…

I could only see a distant shelf of time,
a land of such color man
could never name,
for no such sound would e’er match this pure ~

unafraid, I faced my storm…

I remember,

were a dream to catch me, up, and glowing,
perhaps in that moment, that time, when
you came again to me,

it would be god-thrust and golden,
the whys of life would be answered,
a first for all beginnings,
the lusting shimmer of all ends…

I’s storm would follow the setting,
knowing rise of some future

layered in pieces, in peace.


© Copyright 2005 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Dark Angel
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1 posted 2005-05-20 11:49 PM


it would be god-thrust and golden

Absolutely love the above line....Kari.



Mxx


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2 posted 2005-05-21 12:15 PM


Oh Karilea, this is so beautiful.
Martie
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3 posted 2005-05-21 12:25 PM


Sissie

Yes, I understand!  

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4 posted 2005-05-21 12:52 PM


Oh, yes....quieting is indeed the emotion this brings to the table...beautifully done.
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5 posted 2005-05-21 01:23 AM


Footsteps in the clouds among God's Valley of Trees, this gives me a sense of perfection and of purity.  

What we wouldn't give to know the answers to the why's of life. This is beautifully done, and the picture complements it nicely.

becky

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6 posted 2005-05-21 01:28 AM


You go beyond, and yet a further step.....this is excellent, simply excellent.

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7 posted 2005-05-21 01:28 AM


"unafraid, I faced my storm…

I remember,

were a dream to catch me, up, and glowing,
perhaps in that moment, that time, when
you came again to me,

it would be god-thrust and golden,
the whys of life would be answered,"

this speaks to me...deeply

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8 posted 2005-05-21 05:59 AM


another lovely write
much enjoyed

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9 posted 2005-05-21 10:24 AM


layered in pieces, in peace.

Now lady, this is poetically perfect.
and sigh....so beautiful.  

You know.....you wrote a don't ya??  

Luv ya mom.

I really want to care,
I want to feel something,
let me dig a little deeper
nah, still nothing~
my give a DAMN is busted. Jodee

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10 posted 2005-05-21 11:01 AM


sometimes you leave me speechless -

S

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

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11 posted 2005-05-23 08:23 AM


nice picture... and the words.. go well with the colors..and the scene..

nicely doen ma'am.. as usual..

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12 posted 2005-05-23 11:28 AM


yes....loevly marriage of words to visuals...to souL

**babygirL**

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Dark Stranger
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13 posted 2005-05-23 03:19 PM


ms sunshine..this one caught my eye
can see so many places in that sky
you captured here


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14 posted 2005-05-23 07:24 PM


Stunning write!

Eric

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15 posted 2005-05-23 09:52 PM


Absolutely beautiful dear Karilea.
Another keeper for my library.
Hugs to you hip-sis.

Life is one great big canvas;
throw all the paint on it you can.
                    -Danny Kaye

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16 posted 2005-05-24 10:16 AM


it would be god-thrust and golden,
the whys of life would be answered,
a first for all beginnings,
the lusting shimmer of all ends…

I’s storm would follow the setting,
knowing rise of some future

layered in pieces, in peace.

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the always tardy moth just wanted to tell you how truly lovely this is... you captured the spirituality of the moment...very lovely offering poetess of the sun.

I am sure of my reasons, embracing the seasons,
and the sacred simplicity of you at my side.

Vienna Teng

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17 posted 2005-05-24 11:06 AM


Absolutely beautiful work. *S*
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