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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2005-05-20 01:09 PM

You were lightning
i became the rain
i trembled
in the clouds collapse
then wept in your mist
when you left me lonely

you were lightning
i became the rain
you captured me
in the storm
but remarried your sky
and now douse me
with silence.

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (05-21-2005 10:02 PM).]

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2005-05-20 02:17 PM

Michele, I must reiterate what I have written in past replies, your use of nature metaphors really knocks my wings off! It really intensifies my appreciation of your emotes!

Sending you a warm hug of comfort ~ and of appreciation for your talent!

Linda

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

2 posted 2005-05-20 03:26 PM

....sigh....so it goes.....

                 "...Know what you know of air masses
                    and the jetstreams, you cannot stay
                    or turn its course. The storm will be.
And when the lightning strikes,
it is not enough to know why."

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

3 posted 2005-05-20 04:06 PM

I got some noise for ya
come here inky..

kewl write babe

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

4 posted 2005-05-21 05:01 PM

Michelle,
You are an artist with words, and the thunder clapped hard in your final verse.
Hugs Sweetie.
TD

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2005-05-21 05:12 PM

I enjoy you deeply, dear Michele!

Lightning is powerful, but in the same time it is an ephemeral phenomenon!

Love and hugs.
Margherita

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

6 posted 2005-05-22 06:53 AM

Not bad at all

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2005-05-22 08:03 PM

neat write

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

8 posted 2005-05-22 08:57 PM

excellent metaphors - can feel this my friend -

S

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

9 posted 2005-05-23 07:39 AM

thanks kids for stopping by

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

10 posted 2005-05-24 03:17 AM

Amazing writing, as always!

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

11 posted 2005-05-24 08:58 AM

Wonderful!

These are my favorite lines:

"then wept in your mist
when you left me lonely"

perfectly said.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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