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Susan
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0 posted 2005-05-19 03:30 PM


Je sens la grande vulnérabilité aujourd'hui


the pale of yellow . . . blossoms
open before the sun
as she parades her delicate
delighting in the warm
fragile in her newness

still,

she fears the horizon
the blackening in promise
that winter has not quite gone
and the threat of storm
lies heavy upon air

oh,

she,
such a tender little blossom
virgin to this world
innocent in her understanding
bared before the impending
how she wishes for a stone
to be rolled along side her
to shield and to hide her
from the coming of the crying

yet—

she was born to be wild
and though the weather will wear upon her
her stalk will stand steady
and her stem will grow strong

so,

tuck away your fear little flower
and push your petals upward
you were not meant to be a hothouse pretty
but the field sprung inspiration
for a meadowlark’s song

s.a.t.



If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

[This message has been edited by Susan (05-19-2005 06:53 PM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2005-05-19 03:34 PM


yet—

she was born to be wild

~*~

Amen.


JL
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2 posted 2005-05-19 03:52 PM


Very nice write.

****************

Thanks Sunshine.... now I've got that song stuck in my head...

JL


Susan
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3 posted 2005-05-19 03:57 PM


oh yeah, JL - i was fine until you pointed out it was a song!  now you got my motor runnin'!

thank you both, my friends

S

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Margherita
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4 posted 2005-05-19 05:47 PM


Elasticity
a premise to stand rough blows
without succumbing


I wrote this senryu recently and it came to mind now, while reading about your delicate flower.

This needs to be taken to heart!

A very beautiful and wise write, dear Susan!

Love, Margherita

Susan
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5 posted 2005-05-19 06:54 PM


Ah, Margherita - you write wise words, and your warm is sooo appreciated -

hugs - Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

passing shadows
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6 posted 2005-05-19 07:43 PM


very mich enjoyed this
MGROVES
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7 posted 2005-05-20 06:54 AM


very nice~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Earth Angel
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8 posted 2005-05-20 10:10 AM


Oh, no! "Born To Be Wild" is one of those songs that gets into my head as well ~ and stays there until I "head out on the highway"! lol

This was a delicate and highly poetic write. Rise up, little flower! You were born to be wild! Flowers

Lovin' hugs,
Linda


Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2005-05-20 10:14 AM


Susan
A delight to read my little flower.

inkedgoddess
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10 posted 2005-05-20 10:35 AM


you set her free suzz...
glorious write

Susan
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11 posted 2005-05-20 10:50 AM


thank you my friends - you bless me with your warm and smile me with your hearts -

Hugs   Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

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12 posted 2005-05-20 08:12 PM


Lovely...James
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13 posted 2005-05-20 10:11 PM


Susan,  certainly one of your finest ever.
No question about it here...

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14 posted 2005-05-21 06:54 AM


Yes i do like this poem...and its gentility..thank you..

Goldenrose.

Justice cannot be for oneside alone, but must be for both. (Eleanor Roosevelt)

Susan
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15 posted 2005-05-21 11:06 AM


Gentlemen - you smile me happy - thank you for your kindness, my friends-

  Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

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16 posted 2005-05-22 09:56 PM


you feel vulnerability....sigh know that too...nicely said Susan~

I came from the mountain
The crust of creation
My whole situtaion-made from clay to stone

Susan
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17 posted 2005-05-23 10:18 AM


Ah, thank you greeneyes - for your understanding  

S

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

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18 posted 2005-05-24 10:00 AM


This is wonderful, Susan... beautiful work!
Susan
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19 posted 2005-05-24 01:18 PM


thank you S - most kind S

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

LeeJ
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20 posted 2005-05-26 08:52 AM


such a tender little blossom
virgin to this world
innocent in her understanding
bared before the impending
how she wishes for a stone
to be rolled along side her
to shield and to hide her
from the coming of the crying


Susan, I'm going right now to look for a stone to roll to her, perhaps it will help

Now, the rest of the day, I'll be hearing Born to be Wild...and revin up my pretend bike.....

Seriously, this was exquisit and softly done, yet, strongly felt by the reader, could catch the scent of flowers, images were beatifully executed...

Cherish this, and the warmth which sparkles from your heart...not to mention, the realistic nature of it, portraying the fears that we have, yet, conquer...

Tremendous!

Susan
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21 posted 2005-05-26 10:08 AM


LeeJ - thank you soooo much - your words touch me - sometimes a good stone would be of great value -

Thanks you my dear friend - and hugs -   Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

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