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those ribbed days |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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life bends like a thick string i am a piece of this, a tiny twisted strand and how I ache, for the brown corduroy that once held my legs warm oh those ribbed days when the wind played street wires into song then bit my cheeks red: i felt naked then, and bold and hopped over squares that marked my days like a stone it is years, now, though, some memories never fade and my skin has peeled away with the wag of fingers and eyes that were never lidded "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" Michael Hutchence (INXS) |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh golly I liked this... it is years, now, though, some memories never fade and my skin has peeled away with the wag of fingers and eyes that were never lidded Oh but this does ache, and I too have feel that familiar ache, but unfortunately not for brown cords, probably just old-fashioned blue bloomers  Beautifully written elusive one! ~* Let's spend less time worrying when our life's going to end, and more on when it's going to start *~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"it is years, now, though, some memories never fade and my skin has peeled away with the wag of fingers and eyes that were never lidded" You speak so well for the many. Enjoyed! |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Strong delivery, story line, and metaphors.. enjoyed ----------ice ><> |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
oh those ribbed days when the wind played street wires into song then bit my cheeks red: i felt naked then, and bold and hopped over squares that marked my days like a stone ------------------------------ Childhood memories came flooding back when I read this Maree. I agree with Ice, the metaphors in this are excellent. Very well done little one.... Your ink flows, and again, we have been gifted.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree "i am a piece of this, a tiny twisted strand and how I ache, for the brown corduroy that once held my legs warm" You weave yourself well! Sending warm hugs!  |
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Alicia Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 279 |
...maree maree. how is it that, how can it be, how do you do?... the title is enough. this: "life bends like a thick string i am a piece of this"...is even more. and, "when the wind played street wires into song then bit my cheeks red"...what you notice! more. in e. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful beautiful Maree.. your unique imagery is so special. New pic? Love it!!!!  Hugs~ Life is one great big canvas; |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
One of the best things you've written. I REALLY like this one Darksis |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Maree?... I'm so glad I decided to pop in here tonight... I absolutely love this... This?... and you... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
~WOW~ Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Maree, I think this is beautiful.  K |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
wow! loved that string thing! and the bite of those wires....very cool |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"i felt naked then, and bold and hopped over squares that marked my days like a stone it is years, now, though, some memories never fade" really, this is outstanding.... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sharon, the memory in this poem was during the winter time (what we're heading into now *pout*) if it would've been a summer memory, I would've ached for my lime green flares lol Thank for your reply myserious one Honeybunch, I am so glad you enjoyed, i thank you. ice, I thank you, glad you enjoyed. Bella Donna, you are wondermous..thank you. Martie, Thank you m'friend for being you and your reply and the warm hugs Alicia, what i notice? it's just parts of me that haven't left ...yet. You're lovely and i thank you.  Nancy thank you so much Brother Ed? if you really like this one, then I am more than thrilled with it Thank you."we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" Michael Hutchence (INXS) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Vicky, I'm glad you decided to pop in too, Thank you! Love you too girly Nightshade, Thank you for the WOW  Kamla, I'm glad you think so, thank you. Midnite, i hear them like i'm standing right there now under them. Thank you for your kind reply. SEA, ahhh Sea, how you remind me of that poem. Thank you for your lovely reply and for popping in. "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
needed my daily dose of DA poetry....  miss your words gal... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank goodness for people who bump...just because... where was I, anyway? LOL...probably unpacking... but little one, you unpacked a wallop here... I would have taken the same lines as the others, who are, I am sure, all finding a special reason to repeat the same phrase, and each reason is as individual and different as every poem you present to us. So, when you are going to start submitting your work, anyway? Hmmm? |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Bella, yer too sweet... got my daily does of you, now i can go to work happy. hey Sunshinygal, thank you baby, you were prolly writing that masterpiece that i am waiting for *big smile* Submitting my work? Hmmm that i'll have to think about. Adagio, thanks for popping in, but ya wanna tell me what the light bulb's all about? Hanging upside down here  Thank you all Mxx "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
the wind playing street wires into song...I remember that sound! Probably heard that sound hundreds of times and never once considered expressing it in a line of verse....that's why your poetry is always special. That's what you do so very well |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Bello? back at ya, luv ya. and thank you.Deer, you so sweet, thank you. though my measley lil line could never compare to yours "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
FAR OUT KEWL!!! Outstanding work, in an old hippie's mind anywayz. Hugs Maree, Billy "If at first an idea is not absurd, there is no hope for it." |
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