the last time, the first time

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Open Poetry #35

the last time, the first time

Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

0 posted 2005-05-12 10:52 AM

Now,
as if this were the last time,
move your lips on my face
while I touch mine to yours.
Slowly,
as if to memorize
skin we will never touch again,
record my mouth,
receive its offerings of love.
Remember
as if it were the last time,
and I will study you
as if it were the first...

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2005-05-12 10:57 AM

Oh Rebecca, this is perfect and the begining ties in with the end flawlessly. Wonderful writing.

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2005-05-12 11:21 AM

What Donna said, Beki...
Concise, lovely...

to the point.

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

3 posted 2005-05-12 12:29 PM

Wow I really liked this.

Welll Done.

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2005-05-12 03:13 PM

P E R F E C T !!!

Life is one great big canvas;
throw all the paint on it you can.
-Danny Kaye

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

5 posted 2005-05-12 03:16 PM

EXQUISIT!!!!!

adagio
Member

since 2005-03-19

Posts 449
Marrero, La.

6 posted 2005-05-12 05:56 PM

Bravo!!
very well written
adagio

Beki
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA

7 posted 2005-05-14 04:13 AM

thanks everyone so glad you enjoyed

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