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Precipice
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Precipice |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Precipice I looked upon a precipice Over looking present bliss And in the cracks where moss had grown There emanate a lonely moan Beginnings of distilling change Where time begins to rearrange And could not change the wrong to right Nor could I stop the moan of fright It hit me like a giant wave That tumbled me into a grave I knew I could not turn the tide Nor could I turn away and hide For I am but a tumble weed Collecting moss and leaving seed Rolling to tomorrows day And even there I cannot stay Someday the tumble of my bliss Will fall into the precipice |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, no! My beloved Sir Tumbleweed ain't gonna fall off a precipice! ~ Not if I can help it! No way! No how!  Albeit a bit disturbing to someone who cares about you, it was a brilliant and creative piece of writing! You are a bottomless well of poetic treasures! Love & Eternal Light, EA  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Earth Angel And you are a bottomless basket of love and concern.   |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hiya Sy, good morning...this poem lends an air of understanding to who we are as servents...on a wider scope, you seem to be at peace, knowing this is but a course in life...which doesn't last long, and paints our worlds an even brighter hue, in the long run...it certainly has changed colors and shapes for you, my wise poet friend? Did I hit the nail on the head? or did I flatten my finger again....ouch! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LeeJ You not only hit me on the head but you knocked me out. LOL Good morning sweet. |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Loved this one, Try please to keep your balance on that precipice. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
adagio I will, thank you. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Beginnings of distilling change Where time begins to rearrange And could not change the wrong to right Nor could I stop the moan of fright And so we rearrange our time, and hope it stays on our side. In the meantime, I'll give it hell trying to right my wrongs. No only do you write with eloquence, but with a crystal clear mind. And....you make me sigh, Sy~ Thank you for this, it's really lovely. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a tumbleweed...yeah me too |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
I enjoy your writing Seymour, you have a way with words that is just right as is the feeling of this one today. Sincerely Rick |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
BluesSerenade I think I'll call you PinkSerenade, thank you dear. passing, You may tumble but you're no weed. LOL Rick A sincere comment, thank you. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wonderful write! Eric |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ericc Thank you Ericc. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sir Sy, A part of you might fall...but a greater part will remain forever amongst the clouds, whispering words to us that we might continue that which you have unselfishly given to each of us... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, Mighty kind of you. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
your a great person sir  with a big heart~ i miss so much when i stay away~ so now i try to catch all i missed~ especially the smiles~ My spirit will rise |
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