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At first sight ... |
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Jonathan Junior Member
since 2005-05-04
Posts 11Paris |
At First Sight ... Before tomorrow's thoughts distort the mind on karma and coincidence I’ll try to focus, while still magic will supply answers which the spirit satisfy. Yesterday, perhaps by chance, I dined across from eyes which wonders could unwind, with shock synaptic instantly defy Time’s rhyme itself, to soul electrify. That first glance opened understanding. Blind before ‘one’ must have been as every tie to gravity dissolved, ~ no low, no high ~ while everywhere the spirit seemed to fly. Base substance shed, all purer felt, refined, walked on air, trite trammels left behind, senses swam, consumed, reborn as I broke surface ~ joy complete none quantify. The message all embraced and somehow signed dimensions new of rainbow hue, thereby offering a space to multiply intuitions love should qualify, magnified magnficence did find its place in all, as all was redefined ~ impression that itself was heightened by acceptance shared, which nothing need deny The message understanding underlined. No need for questions, no need for reply, ~ answers sprung spontaneous to apply a lining bright to help identify the meaning of the universe, to bind its discords into harmony aligned as limits disappeared, sight cleared, thereby abolishing all need for ‘how ?’ and ‘why ?’ Like lightning current passed. Two intertwined, upwards spiral swept right through the sky to rediscover seven heavens high - both peace, release, within a soul-storm’s eye. Within this vortex[t] top-like spun some kind of harmony ~ unseen yet predefined ~ responding, permeating all, ~ as “my” no sense could keep, swept out by inner eye. We weightless whirled while everything combined in all, through all dimensions ~ instant tie. Past ~ mirage pale ~ shed to transmogrify emotion surge and sudden signify end to beginnings. Soul to soul could bind with much more than base touch, could leave behind all walls, felt joy which logic must defy. Apart from all, yet part of all felt I ! It seemed imagination, - much maligned, by most as tinted outpost for a lie - was in true colours seen as empty sigh - a monochrome excuse or alibi compared with glory storybook devined that far outshines this narrow world purblind. Enlightenment at last could testify to well-spring joy which never can run dry. We share swift strong impressions counter-signed below, recording inklings on the fly, In wonderment these feelings spangle sky. Rhyme splendour spans reflections which won’t die, with every thought and everything, low, high touched, as it were, by karma to unwind in unexpected ways within the mind. ~ These shared perceptions alter for the best our touch on life as here pen comes to rest. Life : A finite succession of infinite opportunities |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is the second time I've read this...very nice...James |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 welcome! what a wonderful read!I am going to enjoy reading you!  quote: |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Like lightning current passed. Two intertwined, upwards spiral swept right through the sky to rediscover seven heavens high - both peace, release, within a soul-storm’s eye." How wonderful this is!! What amazing talent you have, the way you weave your words.. while keeping the reader engaged. I most certainly will be looking for more of your work. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ Life is one great big canvas; |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
This is a beautiful and wellcrafted ode. A-B-B-B-A-A-B-B throughout with a repetive 'eye' at the ending of each line, with well placed punctuation to ease the flow of verbal reading. I like this one muchly, and welcome to Passions.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes...nice format here good write |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
well done!! At first sight is possible, but dang, I like to wait and see what comes out of their mouth before I make a final decision... I do enjoy your style. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
We share swift strong impressions counter-signed below, recording inklings on the fly, In wonderment these feelings spangle sky. Rhyme splendour spans reflections which won’t die, with every thought and everything, low, high touched, as it were, by karma to unwind in unexpected ways within the mind. ~ These shared perceptions alter for the best our touch on life as here pen comes to rest. You're pleasing many with your art... from Passions forums, please don't depart...  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Jonathan, Welcome to Passions! After reading your first verse, I went back to read your name again. Rest assured I will read more of your skilled and vibrant writing! miscellanea |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Came back to read this again, and highlight something I found especially outstanding quote: I am looking forward to more from your delightful fine pen. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Welcome to Passions... Enjoyed your poetry! ~ARH "Let me not to the marriage of true minds |
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