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ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

0 posted 2005-02-21 12:32 PM

set to motion by the ocean of time
tears once living of the giving in rhyme
running so deep, a river's weep of flow
words just turning, life-felt churning and tow

silent this tide of tears once cried and wept
upon which tale would fill thy sail, be swept
a drift of thought which rivers brought and shared
so lost before, against the shore ... unbared

so let my word and heart be heard in such
I've drifted ways of golden rays that touch
pulled in stride my river's tide, now low
always flowing, aching, growing ... the tow

so live to sea, setting it free, don't hide
write forever by the river and tide

"In life's giving ... love is a gift, such worth living."

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2005-02-21 12:38 PM

beautiful
just beautiful

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

2 posted 2005-02-21 12:10 PM

i ... felt as if i were pulled back and forth (tide-like) while reading your words...and the feeling that rushed over me was such a deep sadness.

i love when a writer can bring me to that level, the level of emotion ... not all can, but, i always wonder if the writer also felt that sadness.

it's a good poem that will make me ramble on like this.

~snow

"i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly"

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2005-02-21 01:37 PM

Absolutely beautiful... your internal rhyme reflects the rhythms of the tide... This is excellent!!

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

4 posted 2005-02-21 05:35 PM

great write! much enjoyed. hugs, Chris

You said you'd give me light-
But you never told me about the fire
Stevie Nicks

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

5 posted 2005-02-21 06:23 PM

Beautiful!

~Alli~

*AIM = Alli4000* Journal!

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

6 posted 2005-02-21 06:27 PM

Well done Craig, seems there is a smidge of
river in you as well.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

7 posted 2005-02-21 06:29 PM

The surfaces lovely, the depths profound.
Enjoyed,
TD

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

8 posted 2005-02-22 02:07 PM

river and tide flowing smoothly together.....the journey open....

nice to see you here

~~*~~
I'm Standing on a bridge
I'm waitin in the dark
I thought that you'd be here by now
Theres nothing but the rain
~~**~~

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

9 posted 2005-02-22 02:10 PM

damn...
yep, this exactly is how it is.
very, very well done Craig,
you said it perfectly...

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