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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
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0 posted 2005-04-27 04:47 PM


there is a place. it is not here.
Like an old man in the middle of his art he walked.
He found the most unlikely places.
I could only think how I like your morning conversations.
he seemed a bit lost. I told him who I was and his mouth became a little crocked.
but I didn't want to fix it.
He picked bugs out of the air and off my shirt.
He said I could go barefoot and I told him that was more my type of thing.

I twirl better here. even the cemeteries looked pretty and I wasn't even sad.
Though the stone be cold the house is white, and the floor boards creek with life.
We say things to convey were not from around here. but what could they know.
and what could we possibly say.
in a moment so lush, in a dress so old. in a smile so off.

I like how your shirt wrinkles, and your nose.  
I don't even wish to straighten your misshappened view on me.    

[This message has been edited by Lexy (04-27-2005 07:15 PM).]

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DavePage
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since 2003-12-21
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1 posted 2005-04-27 04:54 PM


I think this brilliant

and the wash does happen and the shirt was bought wrinkled and the nose does twitch and the picture is great

dave

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Gaia
2 posted 2005-04-28 12:10 PM


What an intriguing read! I could feel the apparitions as they danced about your words.
LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
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3 posted 2005-04-28 03:09 PM


how did we pass over this, well, I'm so happy I caught it, what a read....sending you right back up to the top, this deseverves more reading and commenting...one for the Giffer!!!

Truely enjoyed!

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
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4 posted 2005-04-28 03:15 PM


Oh, I am glad this came back up.
I'm with Kacy, the images are brilliant in this.  Well done.

I really want to care,
I want to feel something,
let me dig a little deeper
nah, still nothing~
my give a DAMN is busted. Jodee

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