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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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Lines and walls and the rain begins in a mummer's tap, but you dont hear it, you don't feel me as you sodder circles where my feet once attempted, and you grow leaves now, higher than your hearts reflection that drowns in its sea of seclusion, .......pitiful girl i bruise now, how i paid the price when i tried to reenter, the lines became blueprints i could no longer decipher, and you offered me no translation, the walls became steel which i once could erase, and i learned too late, having pushed too hard i got tossed in the undertow, losing you to lines and walls, as i wonder which of us does the hard time this night? [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (04-22-2005 12:22 PM).] |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Hugging you here Michele. Chris "The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze." |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
awe *hugs* Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Your pen spills an amazing presentation here - so well done - Susan If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
 love your way with words~ My spirit will rise |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
".......pitiful girl i bruise now, how i paid the price when i tried to reenter," ~ Some places just aren't worth revisiting. Sending you big, warm hug, Linda |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"Lines and walls and the rain begins in a mummer's tap, but you dont hear it..." excellent opening...  "i bruise now, how i paid the price when i tried to reenter, the lines became blueprints i could no longer decipher.." excellent middle.... 'having pushed too hard i got tossed in the undertow, losing you to lines and walls, though i wonder which of us does the hard time tonight?" Excellent ending.. And the other lines never once made the poem slouch... -----------ice ><> |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms inky when one closes their eyes who sees the lines and fingers never read between the ink and the paper enjoyed it lady |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"and i learned too late, having pushed too hard i got tossed in the undertow, losing you to lines and walls, as i wonder which of us does the hard time tonight?" as hard as it is too learn the hard way...it still beats not learning at all. I love how you write. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
hugging you for this heart spill.. wonderful writing Mish, as I have come to expect everytime I click on you. Hugs. |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
enjoyed  |
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