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Birthday Suit
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Birthday Suit |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Birthday Suit Born within this birthday suit And placed within a common root I cannot change the filigree That is the one that given me It holds the roots that govern grime Watered in a vase of time Set within that sun of pour Left to find the evermore It seems a temporary phase A cake with a bittersweet glaze A breeze that makes the leaves to dance Within a fantasy of trance And here I dance a piper’s tune Underneath a silver moon A lovers tango sexually A dream in search of ecstasy And in the pit plays heaven and hell In fire and fury with sulfur’s smell |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
sa la vie? Once again, I believe we are on the same wavelength this morn...writing somewhat of the same issue.... Hugs and Good Morning Sy...cup of java? |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
enjoyed bernie  A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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freewheelin Member
since 2005-04-09
Posts 53 |
"And here I dance a piper’s tune Underneath a silver moon A lovers tango sexually A dream in search of ecstasy And in the pit plays heaven and hell In fire and fury with sulfur’s smell" love these lines, instantly put a whole new perspective to the poem, especially the last couplet. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"And here I dance a piper’s tune Underneath a silver moon A lovers tango sexually A dream in search of ecstasy" ~ Oh, yes! I can see you perfectly in my mind's eye! ~ naked and ecstatically dancing a sexual tango beneath a silver moon. You paint an alluring picture this morning! May the piper never stop piping!   EA |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderful morning write! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ You KNOW I always love the filigree of your beautiful verses~ Outstanding are you~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
How you make every subject you write about so lyrical is beyond me. But you do it...everytime. Eric |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
As always a treat to read Charisma |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
See More Your style of rhyme and humor is always pleasent to read, this poem is no exception, and as also is usual, the ending fits the poem well. enjoyed -----------ice ><> |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Boy have I missed your life lessons in rhyme m'friend. (I loved the joke today too  that was hilarious!)This I think will become a favorite. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Good evening Sir Sy, thanx again for another lesson from your vast arsenal. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
what a nice visual for one to sleep on~ outstanding~ My spirit will rise |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
A breeze that makes the leaves to dance Within a fantasy of trance And here I dance a piper’s tune Underneath a silver moon A lovers tango sexually A dream in search of ecstasy There are so many lines I love in this... but these... these danced right into my heart. *S* Beautiful work, my friend! *S* |
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