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I can't forgive you.
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I can't forgive you. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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Thick air, pressure and your satisfaction makes me laugh.. I am battered and weak, struggling to speak to you truths... You will not understand. Mercy is not allowed here, compassion is not defined. You are a mechanical being, unwilling to love. And if I choose not to idolize you, I am the one who is wrong. I can't forgive you, you are my bloodshed and hatred. I miss my unstoppable desire, you bite my tongue, I taste metal and gun powder. You are a weapon my love used against me. I should have known, I should be used to it.. ...absurd manipulation. I can't forgive you, you put me far and deep into darkness just to watch me suffer. And if I call you a liar, I am the one who is wrong. Sadistic flowers hang above my head and I am slowly dying for acceptance. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"I miss my unstoppable desire, you bite my tongue, I taste metal and gun powder. You are a weapon my love used against me. I should have known, I should be used to it.. ...absurd manipulation." this screams devotion and family and gut shot wounds...damn woman.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you said it well |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Thick air, pressure and your satisfaction makes me laugh.. I am battered and weak, struggling to speak to you truths... You will not understand." "I can't forgive you, you are my bloodshed and hatred." I can't even begin to express, how this is exactly ........my ex. This made me shiver.... "I can't forgive you, you put me far and deep into darkness just to watch me suffer. And if I call you a liar, I am the one who is wrong." excellent writing....as always  |
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TexUS Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228 |
Your "mechanical being" has clones. A powerful, excellent write. |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Powerful!! The strength, yet the weakness of abandonment -- it's all felt within the confines of these words. You are a truly Powerful Poet. I hope that the wounds left by the Wicked Imp that hurt you heal. Love forever. Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...you can't or you don't want to...James |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Mercy is not allowed here, compassion is not defined. You are a mechanical being, unwilling to love. ******************************************** a shame isn't it for these machines that walk among the ones that bleed for them in vain? powerful write and felt it here..... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I wanted to quote the entire piece.. amazing. Leaves one with the bitter taste of truth.. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
 *click* has to be saved... "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
know it well meg, more please |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
a truely powerful poet to say the least, this was perfect...truely intense... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Someone as gentle, loving, and creative as you are, most assuredly deserve more than you are receiving. A mechanical man would drain the life-force out of such a sweet and sensitive rose.  You are a fine poetess, Kaoru. Love & Light, EA |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
OMG!!! "I can't forgive you, you put me far and deep into darkness just to watch me suffer." Yep, this is my (soon to be) ex. Great |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Cuts to the core my friend..... potent and painful gal... HUGS |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Sad, isnt it? How many of us can relate to something that cuts as deeply as this does? It makes you wonder, where is the point? To be repaid for loving unconditionally with spite and hatred... I will never understand the meaning of hurting those who love you most. Sadly enough, I too, relate all too much to this touching piece. HugZ to you warm lady. Brian Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
Brian You have me in tears with your response. Very true. |
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