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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
“I’ve not found a way to dance To the backside of the moon Without getting bled by the edges I can never quite escape” On point and the toes bear hard The weight of slender legs Poised at the perfect angle In wait for the music to begin Another day and sunrise We begin Along concrete and soot There is a gleam Blood red in wait for later hours When it like the bruised flesh Turns an ugly yellow It’s all in the rhythms Of the latest tunes Cranked up body busting vibes We wait to turn ourselves out on floor Where we can gyrate the hips and suckle Honey smiles as we pass the rest “Does this make my ass look fat?” after all…if we don’t have our looks who is going to stare and in the end we might find two pirouettes enough to spin us into the popular set and success of course follow cells phone ring tones set to annoy even the most erudite among us Repoussé of strings still waits To be polished and breakfast comes from The notes we swallowed Still the plait of hands across the air And the moon shines her fading face Off to the east somewhere watching me salve the cuts from another curve around the shadow side |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
you have words and the thoughts to go along ... regards sudhir |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Like gold in a bit of sand Brilliant Dave |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
very nice i like the image Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...it's so good to see you...you've been missed!!! "Repoussé of strings still waits To be polished and breakfast comes from The notes we swallowed Still the plait of hands across the air" You are as always, so good at capturing a mood.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thanks for the eyes..and all the nice words folks... Martie.. you are just too kind..and too sweet.. thank you ma'am... passing through... can't stay...but wanted to drop in and read a bit... thought I'd leave a bit'o'my trash here... thanks to you all... the kindness is greatly appreciated |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
usually when we have to ask "does this make my ass look fat?" we already know the answer |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
::chuckling ;; hardly a problem for you from what I've seen... thanks for dropping in.... |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
"Still the plait of hands across the air.." You were saying, about grace? I enjoyed this, especially as it was just last night that I carried the telescope out onto the back deck. I do believe I saw you dancing. Bob |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
::chuckling:: Bob..wasn't me dancing sir...I've two left feet and the only rhythm I have is enough to walk..most of the time..without falling down... and as for grace...my friend... the difference in my stumbling plod of words and the coarse way I present images..is in no measure grace... compared to the way your own words are so precisely formed to leave the reader..feeling as if they were indeed witness to the miracle of creation... you're kind.... but believe me..I know good..and you sir are one of the best I have ever read... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is full of beautiful imagery Captain. I do wish you could stay.. seems you're always passing through. Thank you for gifting us with your words to ponder. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The mind of a muse, the air of the song... the lilt of the tilt... quote: and please, quit stealing my lines?  Excellent, and thank you... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"And the moon shines her fading face Off to the east somewhere watching me salve the cuts from another curve around the shadow side" I'll share my triple antibiotic lotion for those shadowy shallow cuts. The deeper ones that glare require a more intense complete healing treatment.  good to read/feel you again. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
You, my friend, are awesome. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I knew it. It does make my ass look fat. (You coulda just said so...)  sigh god it's good to find you here |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Ooh, yay.I'm so excited... see, I hardly ever make it in here anymore, and the few times that I do, I seldom see your name. It's great to read you again, sir. Loved this entire thing, and especially those lines at the end. You really are an artist.  Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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IndigoEve Member
since 2003-01-10
Posts 279Etched in the illusion of time |
The imagery in this is impeccable. I'll keep it for seconds later. If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ron, mood, color, texture and that trademark longing. Good to read your words again. Corinne |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Beautiful. I truly enjoyed this read. I hope to read more. Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...in many ways...James |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sigh, Sir Ron...Magnifico m'friend, amazing imagery....i've missed you. mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
*bigsmile* oh how I enjoy you..and miss you. *kiss* "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Where we can gyrate the hips and suckle Honey smiles as we pass the rest" ~ Well, this earthy "angel" loved those lines! Gosh, it's good to read you again, cowboy! Take your hat and pants off and stay awhile! lol EO ~ The Earthy One as Marge refers to me! lol |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
please Ron, feel free to litter here any time you wish, and actually, PLEASE, more often?? good to see ya and read ya. I really want to care, |
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Aleta Member
since 2005-04-17
Posts 102Louisiana |
Interesting, this one. Starts off with the elegance of the moon, but a tinge of pain with “getting bled by the edges” … then dips back to the dance, again to the bruises… Some bold remarks in this poem, reflecting the nature of love in its splendor and shadows.. goes well with the theme of an “eclipse”…. Of the heart, of the moon, of the dance. Sorry for the ramble, but working through the thoughts and enjoying the poem. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
In wait for the music to begin Another day and sunrise We begin'''  good to see you always.... ~~*~~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Absolute perfection! |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
stretching my wings, to find you~ **baby **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
your words and visionaries are so symetrical...they take the reader to where you are...fabulous writing |
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