Open Poetry #35 |
Carnivorous Presence |
Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Carnivorous Presence This day seems to hang reflectively, encumbered, as it is, when cumulus begin to tower, darkening with some mystery beyond nature, a threat to skies as oblivion of blue just happens. In the darkening, thunder rumbles low and distant, crouching like a panther, with its deep roar low in its throat, a fierce risk lingering, crawling upward on my skin. In the middle of tulips and hyacinth, where squirrels and rabbits multiply; beneath budding apple trees and crabapple lace, birds are singing a welcome to spring, as redbuds bloom with lush-filled grace a black panther crawls along the plains ready to devour life hungrily. © KRJ April 11, 2005 |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
ah, and I miss the opportunity to experience lightning and thunder! We did have some here this year, though, really unusual. But nothing like what you get there. I remember one night during a business trip to KC, alone in my room, something like the 17th floor of the downtown Marriott (kind of a spooky old place), watching the flashes and listening to the thunder outside. And also remember jumping out of my skin when one hit a couple of blocks away and set off all the car alarms! Hope as is well in your world, hugs, Corinne |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh...sissie...I love a good storm! Appreciate it for me...I would love to be there with you! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Just as long as those overgrown vacuum cleaners don't start sucking away, all is ok with this boy... You wrote it beautifully dear lady.... Very nicely done. |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
The imagery grabbed me in your words, as I picture them in my mind, great stuff. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
You gather the innocent birds and deadly cats of life into a frenzied cage that never lets us forget that there is good and evil about. Well done!! KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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WindWalker Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 1218 |
The imagery in this poem is very good. I love a good storm too! This is very well written! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
your words put us right there... well done mama k... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good one |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
waiting for that storm, i see him crawling, ready to devour my day. loved it Kari mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
a compelling read! Found my reading picking up speed as I went along! sadie |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Your words paint a powerful visual...wonderful write! Eric |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
one cat ya can't tame momma nature she's pretty but don't she gots claws? heading for the cellar now! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
left me shaking, looking for a hideaway! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you know I love a good storm good write |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
As I tried to sleep last night I heard it.. and you described it well. I love Florida storms. In the daylight. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This left me in want of a good spring thunderstorm. Excellent write hip-sis. For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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