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Armour Of Noir
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Armour Of Noir |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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You shroud yourself in darkness refusing to allow light to shine. Holding warmth at bay, you feel only the chill of your pain clinging to it wrapping it tightly around the twist of your soul.. and I cry and I try... God, I try to rip the cloth, cut holes in it so that light might seep through but you have fashioned the layering just so that now, even the brightest rays of hope can no longer reach your core, your heart you've ascribed in armour of noir. I really want to care, I want to feel something, let me dig a little deeper nah, still nothing~ my give a DAMN is busted. Jodee |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
but you have fashioned the layering just so that now, even the brightest rays of hope can no longer reach your core, I wish I had written this, Donna..it's perfect!! hugs M |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
lol...perfect M, well....I don't believe in perfect but I do thank you for that.. but also, very very sad.... hugs. I really want to care, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dang, gal... highly visual! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I do know that sad Donna, have lived it on and off for a few years now...  M |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"and I cry and I try... God, I try to rip the cloth, cut holes in it so that light might seep through" This just aches so bad sweet lady. Pulls at the heart strings. Sending big hugs your way. For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
If your Light can't reach him, nobody else's could! Love & Light, Linda |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you always know how to tug the heart strings |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
maybe with a little practice , well a lot of practice, I could learn to be so expressive so passionate , I promise to keep trying !Thanks adagio |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Really nice...James |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
i used to know someone that could fit this piece....and though i usually try to stick to commenting on the poem, only.... let me just say that when i was trying to give that person light... i pretty much killed me in the process. the best thing i ever did was to remember i deserve more. sorry. this is one of your better written pieces hon. hugs, snow "i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly" |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
I agree with Snow..one of your better poems Donna...but then sometimes darker souled people are deeper...cut through the swaithes of tangled scratching briars and a sunlit glade awaits...it's just it may be a while since the glade was looked upon..enjoyed this..thank you.. Goldenrose. Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.) |
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