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dealing with the dawn
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dealing with the dawn |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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crows ruffle a cry gulls ride the stream and the breeze sweeps away the dream my eyes little sickle shaped slits rise like a dark weed raveled by the slap of dawn they open to the sea to find the moon and you blue and planetary [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (04-05-2005 07:32 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You write like an angel...  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
and you gave me my wings lymls and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
It is always a pleasure to read your unique imagery and wording! You have such a gift of creativity! sadie |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Yes, Maree...just what Sadie said...and also "little sickle shaped slits rise like a dark weed" The first part of that sort of threw me off...but the ending is just like you! Now my eyes, deal with dawn with little sickle shaped slits...I know because I've seen them.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A wonderful write Maree!! Into my library with this treasure. Hugs~Nancy For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
oh man..... I WISH I HAD WROTE THIS!!!! how do you do this? so much imagery and so few words.... I loved the surreal, ethereal, essence.. awesome write poetess Maree.  It's only words and words are all I have to take your heart away. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Look how you glow in your grow, Maree... Simply amazing...  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
sheeshhh, agree with all the above, not much else I could say to complement this any better....except...one word...signficant |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
bella this could be my favourite, flawless this |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
again enchanted |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Tis good, this slap of dawn....takes some of us a while to see the light, but it's still good when we finally do..... Gosh I do like that image! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I missed this one... very glad it was brought up again. Ditto what Karen said...  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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