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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2005-04-05 12:04 PM

~*~

I do not take you lightly
rather I touch and trace
with shaking fingertips
the searing heat
as smoke streams from my lips,
and kindles a crazy kind of love.

As silence whispers with intent
coughing up my words, untamed.
Forthcoming and misconstrued,
caught in the act
of licking at the flames.

I am she who fans the breeze
then looks the other way.
Rising with each breath
painting shadows on the wall
that might mean something more than this.
I have no shame.

No, I do not take you lightly
or make believe that it is easy
that I might temper you in the moonlight
or consume the glowing embers
of desire passing by.
But I can close my eyes and lie beside the edge,
and reach for you in dreams .

You see, I've burned this way forever
for as long as I can remember.
But I am not so brazen
that I might take you lightly
and dare to play with fire,
or make a promise I can't keep.

~*~

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2005-04-05 12:24 PM

that I might temper you in the moonlight
or consume the glowing embers
of desire passing by.
But I can close my eyes and lie beside the edge,
and reach for you in dreams .

You see, I've burned this way forever
for as long as I can remember.
But I am not so brazen
that I might take you lightly
and dare to play with fire,
or make a promise I can't keep.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

WOOO HOOO -- MOTH ANTHEM!!!!!!
this one so goes into me mothy library...
smoke and ash....oh yeah... yaya

It's only words and words are all I have to take your heart away.

soul drifter
Senior Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

2 posted 2005-04-05 01:09 AM

Wonderful. So many lines I loved...incredibly well-written.

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

3 posted 2005-04-05 06:48 AM

hmmm bluzzzzy does it again...

enjoyed it !!

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

4 posted 2005-04-05 08:30 AM

I enjoyed this, complexity is the word that springs to mind, but that’s just my interpretation. Well done, take care!

"A spring shower was cause to run
Until you twirled me in the rain" ~ BDC

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

5 posted 2005-04-05 08:53 AM

You see, I've burned this way forever
for as long as I can remember.
But I am not so brazen
that I might take you lightly
and dare to play with fire,
or make a promise I can't keep.

DS said it hon....You have done it again,
and this just reached write in....
and settled within me with a smile...

Luv ya lady!

I really want to care,
I want to feel something,
let me dig a little deeper
nah, still nothing~
my give a DAMN is busted. Jodee

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2005-04-05 09:01 AM

OH WOW!!
I'm not even going to try and choose my fav lines here Bluesy!!
A very blunt, yet understanding write.
Excellent!!
Hugs~Nancy

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

7 posted 2005-04-05 09:24 AM

Whew -- did somebody just turn up the heat in here??

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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

8 posted 2005-04-05 09:27 AM

always reading you and missing the Blues~~

hugs and much love
M

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

9 posted 2005-04-05 09:40 AM

"I am she who fans the breeze
then looks the other way."

kinda like a Santa Ana wind

nice imagery, bluesy

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

10 posted 2005-04-05 11:46 AM

I am so pleased, thank you everyone!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

11 posted 2005-04-05 03:38 PM

ROFL @ JM's response. *G*

But I can close my eyes and lie beside the edge,
and reach for you in dreams .

These are lines I could have written... wish I'd written... but know I wouldn't have written as well. *S* Excellent write, dear lady! *S*

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

12 posted 2005-04-05 03:54 PM

Blues,
First, let me thank you for the sweet comment you left on my post. As for your post, I am very impressed! I really like how you figuratively incorporated fire thoroughout. Very cohesive. On a personal note, I understood this well but couldn't have put the idea in words if I tried. Loved your title and words! Couldn't agree more--I guess some things are better brushed aside.

misce

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