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the dawn of you |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Suddenly your smile Beams a light within my heart Dispelling darkness |
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netsky Member
since 2005-03-29
Posts 148Miami |
I do so like short poems keenly honed. This is nice! Do you feel it is fully optimized? The last line offers many possiblitities for imaginative metaphor. It could almost become a "challenge" poem.. if you were to want to see how rich a stage you have set for many other alternate third lines. neat as it is. Yes, indeed. thank you. reid |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I've known this smile, feels great doesn't it!  "A spring shower was cause to run |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Yes you do that every time I read you.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*smiling at Sys astute reply... and at the smile in your words.  It's only words and words are all I have to take your heart away. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
It's nice to have someone, who can do that. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Belle, and you in turn, beamed light out into the world with your lovely senryu! Love & Light, Linda |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful!! Much enjoyed this one! Hugs~N For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful! Eric |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You shed the softest light, suthern. Enjoyed, muchly~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
netsky: Thank you very much! *S* EagleOne: That it does, my friend... that it does. *S* Thank you!! Seymour: You dear! *S* Thank you so much!  JM: Thank you so much, dear lady. *S* SmartChick: Yes... it is. *S* Thank you! *S* EA: Big hugs to you for that, my friend... thank you! *S* Enchantress: Thank you very much! *S* Ericc: Thank you so much! *S* Bluesy: What a lovely thing to say... thank you! *S* |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Now here's a picture to take through the day....and I think I will! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
WHOO-HOO love this gal! PERFECT! I really want to care, |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Wooooooowwwww! The perfect harmony in word and thought! Sounds like love is in the air! I think I'll shelf this one for a smile on a rainy day! Many thanks. miscellanea |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"funny" how that works M |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ratleader: You're the master of senyru/haiku... so your words mean a lot to me. Thank you! *S* GS: Thank you so much, kind lady! *S* miscellanea: Your response gave me a smile that's greatly appreciated even though it isn't raining yet. *S* Thank you!!! nakdthoughts: Yes... it is. *S* Thank you!! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
suthern Isn't it funny how such a simple thing has such a profound effect...the same is true of your poem. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
your beautiful words, reflect the perfect day...especially the title, loved this.... |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
A smile is the most precious thing on earth no matter whether given or received which is probably why babies smile before they can talk. May you always enjoy the light! |
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