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Poetry becomes morphine
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Poetry becomes morphine |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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The sky is too busy, rain thoughts drizzle then slip off the runway, in a technicolor dream spring and winter still battle, a daisy shivers in wetskin anxious to chisel through her tomb, the rescue squad is called back something ends but will thrive in the marshes love becomes punishment; the stars atrophy behind their silver paint and someone's name is erased from the marquise, rain promises, but fails landing in vain, on the apathy of the stoic, failing to soften the old rocks as it whips them in full view of the ocean, ceasing to succumb, love commits suicide on an early spring night when frost still threatens the daffodil, squeaking along in dots and dashes, begging to be created, above the shattered sky poetry becomes a shot of morphine. [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (03-25-2005 11:22 AM).] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
yes, yes, yes, remarkable verbage and style....enjoyed this a lot. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
its the best drug I know Michelle.  I need my daily dose everyday too. Hugs, this was wonderfully done. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It does seem like sometimes even nature can't get it right... but that leaves us free to write of it... There's a huge sense of maturity that has been coming along in your poetry, Michele...and I have been enjoying it very much. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
May I borrow a little bit of your over-abundant poetic talent?!?  EA |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Michele I admire your talent for imagery so much. I especially enjoyed this read. ~Sending hugs your way~ For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
....morphine...I used to think all poets were morphs -- then I became one.... Michelle, this is a stunning poem -- starkly beautiful in every way. It's one of your best, which is saying a lot in itself, but this one goes beyond, expresses the spirit of the woman who wrote it, in a way I haven't seen. I'm going to study this one, for a lesson in how to write. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
The morphine in this poem got me high... ___________ice ><> |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Great work! Though, I think in my world there is still room for both. *smile* |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"ceasing to succumb, love commits suicide on an early spring night when frost still threatens the daffodil, squeaking along in dots and dashes, begging to be created, above the shattered sky poetry becomes a shot of morphine." and you are the needle that carries the words.. saw this the other day but didn't have time to read...so I went a trollin' the forum to find it because I just knew...  you are freakin' amazing! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
:thumbs up: |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
poetry is always healing, always offers pain relief for me well done, Mish! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
there is a great deal of depth in this for contemplation - at least to me - and a bit of an edge as well - well done S If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
wonderful! Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
the style made it difficult for me to get through, maybe i am right, maybe i am an idiot, but i could not find what connected the poem. maybe that is the point? in any case, thanks for making my brain work. -majnu |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
It started out perfect and so I kept thinking it just couldn't get any better. And then, with every single line it did! Amazing. Personally, I don't much like morphine (yes, I took it legally!), but it does make me giggle a little, and it does help take away the pain. I think, for me, that adds a lot of meaning to this. Gonna keep it in my library, and thank you for this. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
inkedgoddess, love this! I am in awe how you perceptively use metaphors of nature to divulge your heart. miscellanea |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
love becomes punishment poetry becomes morphine ink becomes manna... nice cooking here |
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