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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2005-03-21 10:31 PM

He waits
at sorrows edge
where the sands
first encounter the sea
then sadly merge beneath,

and she can only blink,

in glimpses
as the foam makes peaks,

seeking insulation
of the dark and deep,

beyond the rocks
where eyes of faith
no longer penetrate
the deception of the locking waves
that guard her in embrace,

he waits

but she can only blink.

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (03-22-2005 11:05 AM).]

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

1 posted 2005-03-21 10:43 PM

Where she cannot -- or will not -- go. Wuch a wistfully sad poem, on so many levels!

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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2005-03-22 12:04 PM

seeking insulation
of the dark and deep,

beyond the rocks
where eyes of faith
no longer penetrate
the deception of the waves
that guard her
in their locked embrace

You write so nice Michele.
Love that blonde, always have and always will.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2005-03-22 05:57 AM

aww Michele

c'mere

You must trust your heart.

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

4 posted 2005-03-22 06:14 AM

There it is, an example
Of why I love poetry...
The compaction of beauty and grace,
Captured in human terms
Be the subject sad or happy...

Thank you Michele

___________ice/ford
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Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

5 posted 2005-03-22 08:48 AM

I honestly felt like crying as I read your poem ~ three times. I literally have a lump in my throat. So lost, so sad, so alone ~ but not really. He awaits her return on the shore.

You are such a fine poetess. You are one of the finest that I have ever had the privilege of reading. Promise me that you will remain with us forever! ~ No, I know that's too much to ask ~ but I thought that I would give it a try!

Love & Spring Light,
Linda

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

6 posted 2005-03-22 08:54 AM

aww Michelle,
damn this aches gal..

Im aching right along with you...

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2005-03-22 08:58 AM

Oh gawd this aches Michele...
awesome write lady.
Hugs~

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

8 posted 2005-03-22 09:02 AM

inkedgoddess
Even sad you are a delight to read.

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

9 posted 2005-03-22 09:36 AM

Oh, my, goodness. Awesome. hugs, Chris

You are ice and fire. The touch of you burns my hands like snow.
~Amy Lowell~

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

10 posted 2005-03-22 11:01 AM

Michele, I would love to see you stretch this one out in prose. You have the format for a good story here, and while it grabbed me poetically, I know there is more underneath the surface...

dive in, and swim with the mermaids.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

11 posted 2005-03-22 11:27 AM

you know how I love the sad ones

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

12 posted 2005-03-22 03:25 PM

Beautifully sad, beautiful description, the imagery?.. outstanding!

M

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

13 posted 2005-03-24 12:41 PM

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

14 posted 2005-03-24 07:04 AM

well, this is just my take, but I don't see this as sad, but an experience...from which a great deal can be learned...perhaps it is my frame of mind today, but you cannot trade your self esteem and identity for the sake of love, and neither should anyone expect you to...it's unfortunate to find out, 2 are not as compatible as what once was thought.

The expression and images in this are passionate with belief...

Well done!!!!

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

15 posted 2005-03-24 07:08 AM

thanks for stopping by
and taking the time to comment

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

16 posted 2005-03-25 10:28 AM

woohoo...

it's twofer tuesday!! wait...its friday..

who cares?

I got a bonus!

love this Michele!!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

17 posted 2005-03-26 11:30 PM

Nice writing...James

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

18 posted 2005-03-26 11:41 PM

thanks for stopping in

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