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Rake it Up
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Rake it Up |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Look at this vibrant sky! It has lost its shroud that hung gray and cloaked across back yards. It flung it off for spring, to see how a sky can beam after the wind has brushed it and torn all wayward leaves that would be fluttering. I can feel the ions shift and quicken the pulse of time, for the minute is crisp and going is not laced but silky with movement. The flowers are listening for the honey bees return their ears cocked their sweetness opening, fragrant and beguiling. Look at this vibrant sky! I see the fragile canopy that held my youth tattered and failed across the ripening grasses, and I think this day is for a lover’s touch, singing nonsense songs, and screeching children gleefully negligent of their preciousness. It is also a day for shedding, and that’s what I do. Like the snake, this skin has grown too old for the slither of my soul, this ripe blossoming is wondrous in its new and ribald glistening, it splits the old and leaves it like an errant leaf, and today I will rake it up. --------- 3-21-2000 because before sometimes is again |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"Like the snake, this skin has grown too old for the slither of my soul," The snake, before we bastardized the symbolism, meant wisdom. Thinking along those lines, those words of yours screamed understanding.  "With all your wisdom, get understanding." That you do. And share with us. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You are the vibrant one, and ever so lovely! As I've said before, you have the gift of making your poetry come alive. Just like the sun beams~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I see it! I hear it! and I feel it! I don't know how you do this but I am so glad you do...beautiful! Beautiful YOU!  Mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
... because before sometimes is again and vibrant is you. |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
So vivid and felt. You really placed me into this early spring landscape landscape with all its myriad sensations....~P |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I like this and understand the reasons to re-visit these ideas. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Martie, you amaze every time |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Perfect Martie...you're writing is amazing!! hugs~ For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
One of the mysteriously powerful things about your poetry, to me, has always been your manipulation of what's been called the pathetic fallacy, or the attribution of human emotion or intention to immaterial things. It can be very effective in the hands of such a capable poet as yourself. Your interpretation of your surroundings in spring is invested with a depth of sympathy, a sincere listening that's rare in poetry, like Colin Clout in Spenser's Shepheardes Calender (one of my favourite poems, for the same reasons I enjoy your poetry). The reason I particularly enjoy your use of this means to poetry is that it always rings with sincerity, and I would never doubt for a second that you really heard, by listening, everything that you report hearing---how the sky has "lost its shroud," having "flung it off for spring," that the flowers anticipate the bees' return and prepare for them (an especially brilliant stanza in my opinion), and finally that the canopy remembers your childhood. This is the kind of intimacy that poets dream of, and it seems to be constantly at your command. You really triumph in this poem by eventually coming back to a humanism, to an educated understanding of yourself and others--- quote:And finally, you either have enough distance even from your own body, or enough intimacy with nature, that you speak of your body as just another aspect of your surroundings quote:Which ends up completing your journey. You're a mystic, Martie, and you make me jealous with your natural intimacy. Someday I'd like to be able to think the same way as you do. Thank you, as always, for sharing your beautiful soul with us--- Brian "God becomes as we are that we may be as he is." ~William Blake |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
When you show us even simple things, you help us to become those things for just a moment, as you become them, understand the spirit that is in everything, even rocks, as you do. The understanding doesn't last forever, but to see your bounty, even for a little while, is uplifting....fulfilling in a way that should not be missed. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
After reading this, then reading what Brian wrote....the poem became even more clear to me and I then could totally appreciate the clarity of your words, the true meaning of what you wrote and a very vivid picture of the scene you saw and painted so perfectly for us to see and savor. Thanx Dear One. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Aint nothing like a Parasite reply  and there aint nothing like a Marti poem either... I love the vocab in this....most of all your emotional honesty and "glee" Ive so much to learn from both of you.  one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Quoting Brian because he says it better And finally, you either have enough distance even from your own body, or enough intimacy with nature, that you speak of your body as just another aspect of your surroundings It's that itimacy you share with the every day things that sets you apart from the rest Martie, as yes, you bring anything to life! Awesome work this. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
and I think this day is for a lover’s touch, singing nonsense songs, and screeching children gleefully negligent of their preciousness. Others have said it better than I ever could... so I'll just add... this is exquisite! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Martie, gawd I just love the way you paint with your pen for us to see... tis truly lovely. Hugs lady! OMG, and I LOVE your new picture too!! Thisun's a  |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
a great poem from the vibrant writer we know as Martie - you just write wonders my friend - Paul |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ 'I see the fragile canopy that held my youth tattered and failed across the ripening grasses, and I think this day is for a lover’s touch, singing nonsense songs, and screeching children gleefully negligent of their preciousness.' Oh, indeed this is pure Martiesque~ Love you sweet Sis~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
STUNNING, Inspiring, oh how the list could go on... I'll just stop with that and trot to this to the library! miscel |
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