Open Poetry #34 |
Staccato |
Catrina Member
since 2004-11-10
Posts 132 |
Staccato She tripped over her slip white, long, pale now too much sun covers dark, burns tingle electric shock sense wakening thinking too much sun No. Truth, taut, nod. Too much time her light didn’t shine. Coyotes echo dark songs. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
should be a law against anything too long..hemmed I enjoy your prospectives ms |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
puzzled in reading you... it always feels Like I should know you...and that I have read you.. (shrugging) nicely done ma'am.. and the ending hold as tight as the rest, while adding that bit of "beyond" top the feel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
enjoyed this |
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Catrina Member
since 2004-11-10
Posts 132 |
Thank you, DS Cpat, just another poet who sounds like a lot of others. If you enjoy, then I smile, passing shadows. Thank you. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) hardly... just another poet... and I have doubts ma'am... Don't mean no disrespect...or to pry.. just seems familiar.. (shrugging) pardon my insanity... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Lerrverly schtuff. again, welcome Maree into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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Dautz Write Member
since 2004-11-16
Posts 96 |
now too much sun covers dark, burns tingle electric shock sense wakening thinking too much sun ------the senses awaken Too much time her light didn’t shine. Coyotes echo dark songs I like staccato... but could hear the distant echo Enjoyed--No daut about it! Catrina, I like your style. DW |
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