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Undress.... |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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You want to go and see her under dark lights used smoke and sweat twisting up along her hips thirsty lust under all those soles that stamp over heartbeats billowing in jealous clouds choking my corner where, I am always waiting for you. Scenery am I to this oppressive stage when it is not my own but hers ~and I cannot even bare to watch~ (but you need me there so you say) a familiar face. So my love you need not know how familiar smiles would fall were they not plastic fixed with gloss and shine to acts Scenes beyond scenes Liars in their own spotlight. I don’t want to stand in the darker shades of grey watching you want someone in the pounding beats that toll self-destruction after midnight when it's too late to change my mind and go home to electric strip light cold that shows every imperfection as i undress you from me. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Good job, Gemma! On many levels, a great write |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yeah.. what ed said..except, instead of Good job..I think it one of your best ma'am... and I have been a fan of you for a good time now |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Great write Gemma, deeply emotional. The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Great write Gemma...such an ache to this..well done! Hugs~ Now while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"as i undress you from me" My favorite line... Well done Gemma!!! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Profound writing lady jane very much enjoyed, although heart wrenching sort of like watching the movie Beyond Boarders with Angelina Jolee (spelling?) But really tugs at the heart strings. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
as i undress you from me. Perfectly said Gemma, I agree with CPat, one of your best. Into my library you go  Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Gemma~ This is just brilliant~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Catrina Member
since 2004-11-10
Posts 132 |
A tight skin, this. I enjoyed it very much. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang |
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