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Open Poetry #34

the love of a passer by

Don_Juan
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since 2004-04-08

Posts 252
Far from where I am going

0 posted 2004-11-09 10:24 PM

the love of a passer by

She sat there
under the tall oak tree
consumed in it's shade
sunlight moved quickly
across her face
as the wind moved
those full green leaves

she smiles
as the wind
moved and messed
her hair's original plan.
an aura of calm
radiated within blue energy
from her eyes
as they peered off
into an empty park

only I
a passer by
would notice.

nice use of muffin

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2004-11-10 05:23 AM

I watch people in passing by too

good write

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2004-11-10 05:44 AM

I like the peaceful thoughts that you shared...wishing them to be mine

sometimes I sit on my porch swing, oblivious to the rest of the world...(don't have an oak tree, although it sounds so calm)

M

Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

3 posted 2004-11-10 06:12 PM

quote:

the love of a passer by

She sat there
under the tall oak tree
consumed in it's shade
sunlight moved quickly
across her face
as the wind moved
those full green leaves

she smiles
as the wind
moved and messed
her hair's original plan.
an aura of calm
radiated within blue energy
from her eyes
as they peered off
into an empty park

only I
a passer by
would notice.

I saw him out of the
corner of my eye
as I sat 'neath the oak tree
wondering as I spied him
if he was watching me

The wind tousled my hair
'I must look a fright'
I thought
But he didn't seem to notice
my fears were all
for naught

He passed by
eyes veiled by the sun
wondering now, I think
he might have been
the one
**
I enjoyed your poem so much I couldn't help but reply poetically!!!

Don_Juan
Member

since 2004-04-08

Posts 252
Far from where I am going

4 posted 2004-11-10 09:38 PM

Thank you all for the replies. Miss Devine i thank you very much for your reply especially(it's quite different from any that i have recieved). Also that poetic reply has inspired me to write a follow up.
thank you very much

nice use of muffin

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