Open Poetry #34 |
In Closing |
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
In Closing For months, clouds went missing. Sky pined for them, for a time before Sun’s cruelty sent Fire’s dirty tongue to lick green from hillsides. Fire left only ashes and Devil’s eau de toilette -- gifts laid at Sky’s painted feet. Sky thought she’d explode into song, when seasons gave way to cleansing, but now that Rain has come, Sky questions the darkness of day and oppressive blanketing of gray as if Dawn refuses to rise. Sky senses a silent grief like a tree knows when to die. [This message has been edited by Corinne (11-08-2004 04:48 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
like how a tree knows when to die. ~*~ Would that we could all go out with such grace... It's so good to read you, m'friend... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
but now that Rain has come, she questions the darkness of day and oppressive weight of gray. Like the final Dawn, she intrinsically senses silent grief, Love the way you write ma'am.... |
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myheart Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 160lost in your eyes |
simply awesome! ~myheart~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne A sensitive write but after devistation comes new life. Even trees are unhappy to die. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
It has been too long since I've read you... this had such a mystical wisdom quality to it--shamanic. Very much enjoyed, C. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Oh My! This reads like a very old tale... Handed down through ages. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne.....How well I understand this...and you just say it so well! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
haunting. sighs write more. please. grins |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
I just dropped in to find this beautifully worded piece. Echoes from above--"More, please!" Shenachie |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Smiling wide.... I love it when you come out to play yes please.... more Maree into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you all very much! Something in the air feels like mourning. Corinne |
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