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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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sixth.morning.november this season kills, threading me through spokes of retrospect _________________________ (w/nods to Ahkmatova & Alicia) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Bravo Bello....maree  to you. It makes me so happy to see your words upon these blue pages. into my library. Mxx  into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
nice, love... **babygirl** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
love those spokes of retrospect. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
David Ignatow once wrote that he had come to a point where he could view a mountain as a mountain and not a comment on his life. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
love that wink to Ahkmatova, and our Alicia For those who do not know: Introduction (Requiem) That was a time, when only the dead Smiled, glad to have peace. And Leningrad Swung from its prisons Like an unused limb. And when gone mad from suffering, The condemned regiments were started off, And the whistles of the locomotives Sang short songs of parting. Over us were stars of death, And innocent Russia Struggled under the bloodied boot, And the tires of the Black Maria. by Anna Ahkmatova March 1940 Translated by Lenore Mayhew and William McNaughton |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Interesting - and glad for the note of Kacy-  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
smiling at you..and very much smiling at Midnitesun too... now, i have to dig dig deeper you are a layered dish  |
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Alicia Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 279 |
precisely. find myself sort of walking around with this on repeat in my head this morning. and i've this enormous head ache from the adventures that took place between last night and now, so it's almost haunting to be hearing this over and again. -you know, how when you're up you're up,...and when you're down, well, yeah, there is always that crashing in to the corner where you're thinkthinkthinking about it all until you're choking with reality/seasons/the spinning earth/the blood and bones of all living things/dust/your lungs and veins/the weeping trees and all the starving soil. gosh. i love it! ha. - and the title, that could be it's own. just a post with simply: catherine wheel. i would have felt even just that. it's here. -surely that's enough out of me, not so sure i've dried out just yet and should stop while i still have some friends? ~a. write more please. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
i like! ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks bella, I would have preferred to expand on the theme but when you're struggling you take what comes, post and hope it kick-starts something Thanks for stopping by babygirl Kethry, kind of sick of them myself John I'm obviously not at that level yet Ah Thanks Kacy, hugs. Initially this poem was longer but I mercilessly cut it down to this. The original was a clearer nod to Ahkmatova's Twenty-First. Night. Monday which never fails to rip me to shreds. For this and other translations see http://plagiarist.com/poetry/poets/1/ Thanks Susan Dawn, layered dish, torture device, whatever floats your boat grins Alicia, for all the times people have asked what's wrong? and I thought I couldn't possibly convey what it was I was feeling..you just did. thanks "...there is always that crashing in to the corner where you're thinkthinkthinking about it all until you're choking with reality/seasons/the spinning earth/the blood and bones of all living things/dust/your lungs and veins/the weeping trees and all the starving soil.." Thanks Alli glad you did Thanks again all R |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Raph...hug! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! you! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wow, thanks for that Raphie, I hadn't read that one before. And I now read a totally different spin on what you wrote. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
OH MY!!! FANTASTIC WRITE!!! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
yes...the season will do that so much in so little as always youre words carry value |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
well, well done raph |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Hugs Martie Ah Kacy , Anna is amazing no?Thank you very much Nancy Thanks Mish hoped they'd say more though Thanks for reading Pandonov always appreciate your visit |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
You say much in so few words, my friend. Corinne |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling).. and you whining at me.... get real raph..and read your stuff with eyes that see the beauty and the art inside.... you owe me mail by the way... lol |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I've read this several times and I still don't know what to say, but I find myself nodding agreement as I read. You touched the heart m'friend. |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Ooh, very lovely. How so much feeling can be expressed in so little words. Love the title, as well.. "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Raph, no more needed to be said, you summed up what everyone has been feeling in those lines, as you always do. I know that stung over here. (Wishville and Happy Days) |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Corinne, thanks for taking the time to read Ron, you're to blind..kind..i meant kind grins Thanks K hugs Thanks soul drifter i'm a man of few words, especially if you don't count the dirty ones Thanks Sue i still would still prefer to write more than 4 line poems one day..sniff..one day |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I hate love. And cold, and hot, and memories... and life. But I always enjoy your words. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yeah, that thing that Ron said...Up there |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
GG I hate all the above, but ya know I like you Thanks ed, but we both know Ron is crazy grins i kid i kid.. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I feel as though you've killed me a million times. |
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Dautz Write Member
since 2004-11-16
Posts 96 |
LOve the title of this. Had some experience making a catherine wheel... Excellent metaphor Dautz... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
megsie?..rise pheonix Dautz, built one? have a bad day at the office, annoying neighbours? |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome Raph...just awesome |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
loved your write! |
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Dautz Write Member
since 2004-11-16
Posts 96 |
Not a bad day at the office or annoying neighbors at all! My daughter participated in Destination Imagination, (formerly Oddesey of the Mind,) and for their challenge, they decided to make the Catherine Wheel as their mechanical device in their skit (among other side trips). I didn't build it, but rather, had experience watching the kids build one out of the polysty posterboard. They cut millions of holes in it with exacto knives, then put stained glass cellophane behind it and shined a light in such a way that they were able to spin in for a desired affect in their shadow play. It was awesome! The team won the regional contest and placed third or fourth at the state level. Glad to see your poem and title! I had forgotten about the catherine wheel! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I don't do Mondays or mornings so loved this. More importantly Alicia's explanation made just about too much sense didn't it? Nice to see you here Raph, and hope you are feeling well, and enjoying the hustle and bustle of this crazy season. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Raph, I always love to read your writes, because I know that I'm going to learn something that I didn't know before. I still say that you can say more in a few words than most can say in a book.....and I still wish that I could do that!! (Hey, did I ever tell you that your philosophies on life remind me so much of some of the philosophies that my Gary has? I think I have told you??) Hugs, my friend Ethel |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
you shine as a brilliant focused light. bravo! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good write |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
you have beautiful eyes m'friend I just had to  this one back upsmiling  mxx Oh, you speak to me in riddles |
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