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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2004-11-05 07:37 AM

Lines they say
Run two ways
But that’s not always true

When it rained
I stood under the eave
Letting the spiral of smoke drift
As I tried to wrap around me
The edges of you
That I might tuck behind my eyes
Those images and let them burn through
The glazed film
That kept me from seeing you

Done,
I flipped the end to the wind
As I turned to go back inside
But stopped a moment
To let the mist hit my face

And pretend
It was your lips that wet me
leaving me

warm

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2004-11-05 07:59 AM

Capt,
A warm misty thought, enjoyed.

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

2 posted 2004-11-05 08:23 AM

Lines they say
Run two ways
But that’s not always true

Perhaps, perhaps not!  How does time run?  Is it linear or does it run in a cycle?  The older I become, the more I think "cycle".

I so enjoy your writing. It speaks softly but elicits major "feel".

               miscellanea

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-11-05 08:25 AM

you capture the essence of deep feelings so well...a pleasure to read

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2004-11-05 08:28 AM

But stopped a moment
To let the mist hit my face

And pretend
It was your lips that wet me
leaving me

warm

smiling here, absolutely lovely m'friend...

Mxx

into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread.
~Sarah McLachlan~

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

5 posted 2004-11-05 08:35 AM

Wonderful Ron. You make words dance.

believe in what your heart feels...

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2004-11-05 09:05 AM

Shimmering eyes here...
could be allergies,
but then, it could just be
a perfect poem.

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

7 posted 2004-11-05 10:47 PM

mmmmmmmm- sigh -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2004-11-06 10:51 AM

Ron

"Lines they say
Run two ways
But that’s not always true"

I love the thought of that!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2004-11-06 10:55 AM

I love how you free verse!

Copperbell
Senior Member

since 2003-11-08

Posts 956

10 posted 2004-11-06 11:07 AM

Loved this...could see it, feel it, smell it all

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

11 posted 2004-11-06 01:44 PM

Now THAT was poetry m'friend.

babygirlwlove
Senior Member

since 2004-10-10

Posts 1180
New York City

12 posted 2004-11-06 01:47 PM

And pretend
It was your lips that wet me
leaving me

warm
*******************

yeah....smooth stuff, chief...
smooooooooooth...

so much love,
**babyblu**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

13 posted 2004-11-06 02:07 PM

killer..absolutely killer ending.damn

BloomingRose
Member Elite

since 2000-08-09

Posts 3092
Florida

14 posted 2004-11-06 03:50 PM

Romantic thoughts do drift in. Nice poem.

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