Open Poetry #34 |
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First Snow.....Tanka |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
My shadow mocks me in the autumn full moon light this my last trip down a silent snow dogs my heels and coats the mountain in white |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
This is a very descriptive piece. I could feel the weight of the snow. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Very nice.... ![]() "a silent snow dogs my heels and coats the mountain in white" A beautiful scene in the minds eye.... enjoyed ---------ice/ford ><> |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Superb! I too especially love the line about the snow dogging at your heels. From a distance, the mountains must be wearing cotton petticoats dotted with eyelet lace. That's what I can see, so I think I will take that away with me and maybe it will need to be placed within a poem from my hand. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A beautiful Tanka! Wonderful imagery..very much enjoyed. Hugs~ Now while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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kaile![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Hi INclan, glad i came back in time to read your latest offering. your talent in these japanese forms is beyond compare |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this made me feel not the weight, but a more positive awe of the first snow... Good one |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
a silent snow dogs my heels ~*~ Oh, yes... Heavy on young doe's eyelash White tail disappears Mocassins invisible Snow comes singing lullabyes |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
InClan~ How *gifted* you are ... and how lovely is this ? VERY~ *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
My deepest thanks to all who responded. To recieve such praise, from poets that I read and respect, is indeed an honor. INclan |
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