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DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

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0 posted 2004-10-31 01:07 PM

Echoing mirrors on a reflection of torn thoughts
That in spring danced in buds to steal hearts
We danced in spring tilting hair to swrile delights
Than in grass became an image that danced as we thought of flowering next year
In winter
warm
We thought often of the caress of the high trees touching the bark as we planned we make
Ideas
Gentle
We swirled empty ideas empty words empty thoughts to move ideas to a life that needs to know
In winter
cold
We move our gentle thoughts to bright fires that fall to display images on a hot surface
In heat
warm
Sparkling in the fire we feel to feel to know to understand images on a hot surface
Dawn rises to who you are

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2004-10-31 02:44 PM

Dawn rises to who you are

Great feeling to this one, dear Dave.

You developed beautiful thoughts and their poetical display is very well done.

Love, Margherita

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

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2 posted 2004-10-31 02:49 PM

Thanks

Pretty gutrall

The raw stuff seems to be tonights menu

Dave

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

3 posted 2004-10-31 04:25 PM

"Dawn rises to who you are"

Yes I see it and it's beautiful.

Love that ending line Dave.

Maree

Oh, you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
My body aches to breathe your breath
Your words keep me alive
~Sarah McLaughlan~

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

4 posted 2004-10-31 04:41 PM

"Dawn rises to who you are"

It most certainly does Dave.
Good write..much enjoyed.
Hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

5 posted 2004-10-31 08:56 PM

agreed!

MGROVES

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california

6 posted 2004-11-01 09:33 AM

very nice

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

7 posted 2004-11-01 12:19 PM

Dark Angel

Dawn has to be one of the most exciting times of a day unless you wanted to sleep without a chorus.

We often consider ourselves at dawn.

thanks

Dave

Maree
Oh, you speak to me in riddles
and you speak to me in rhymes
My body aches to breathe your breath
Your words keep me alive

You danced to me in words
speaking words that I've heard
and failed to even realise
yours should have been heard

Dave

Enchantress

Thanks - Autumn and Winter I like but I dont get 15 foot showdrifts.

Dave

passing shadows

Thanks

Dave

MGROVES

Thanks

Dave

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

8 posted 2004-11-01 08:03 PM

I especially connect with these flows of emotion you write Dave. Reminds me of the sea coming to the shore.
Great images here.
TD

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

9 posted 2004-11-02 03:30 PM

ThisDiamond

Thanks TD - I have to actually fight not to review themes, hit cliches, churn out the same thoughts and still the sea stays in my mind when I write.

I have always put this down to my mother being from North Shields and Trawlermen in my family.

thanks

Dave

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