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Autumn night
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Autumn night |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Autumn night Clean night Quiet night Frisky night Love of night Autumn night Sleep tight Feel right Autumn Night Teaching a darken room On air To love at first sight Warming ideas Over closeness To ferment Ideas cold In a body Snuggling Into birth In Summer's Hot Your eyes Feel Real Two nights As the stars Crystal Asthetic Shepherded Mars Quick Riposte For senses From afar Dancing On different world Streams of hair You served Jupiter In Solar winds Sparkling patterns For my treat Written To a cold soul By a cold soul To warm Fisherman On cold seas Seeking |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dave, I enjoyed your "Autumn night". Great write! Love, Margherita  |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Put the final phrase in for me Autumn night Thanks Dave |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
Dave, Great Poem. :-) ~Laura~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a kind of bouncy feeling, a little frisky, and then the last verse...well...that brought a sigh |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Margherita I think I am getting old Dave ParisGrl Thanks Laura I will I think make a change to my writing though and spend more time before I put it onto the site. Often I just select "Post a New" and wait to see what comes out. Dave passing shadows Yes a little frisky and bouncy but I tried to keep it in the main - Spanish Main - possibly. I wish some times that English humour when we enjoy making fools of ourselves - farce we call it - could travel to the US. Thoughts on the original and the rewrite were gently making fun in an English way. Thanks Dave |
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