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marcel
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since 2003-03-02

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az, usa

0 posted 2004-10-30 02:16 AM

Her Whispered Sorrow

At the center of her happiness and pain,
Lies a weltering tree of patience and lies;
And on its ancient branches crawl the worms of contempt,
Gnawing and chewing on strong but brittle hands---
Hands that weep and grow tired,
Attempting to hold onto the fruits of forgotten joy.

The moon’s glare shows no pity
Making autumn leaves appear as burning stars,
Shining sadness onto love’s promise
As cherry apples drop alone and uneaten,
Feeding neither wisdom nor comfort
To the center of his weltering heart.

Marcel

[This message has been edited by marcel (10-30-2004 03:13 AM).]

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2004-10-30 09:09 AM

Marcel~
I hear the 'Whispered Sorrow'~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2004-10-30 10:05 AM

Exceptional images Marcel. You have grown in the breadth of your craft. Nicely done.
TD

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2004-10-30 10:25 AM

The moon’s glare shows no pity
Making autumn leaves appear as burning stars,
Shining sadness onto love’s promise

Very beautiful lines! Sorrow is felt.

Love, Margherita

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2004-10-30 10:48 AM

You whispered this sorrow so very well, Marcel...

Love & Light,
EA

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2004-10-30 01:00 PM

oh...this is just sadly beautiful!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2004-10-30 02:10 PM

Ooh such a melancholy write...
very much enjoyed!
Hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2004-10-30 10:43 PM

Enjoyed...James

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

8 posted 2004-11-01 07:52 PM

Deserving of another round my friend.
A wonderful write.
TD

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

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The World of Poetry

9 posted 2004-11-01 08:18 PM

such vivid images . . . enjoyed.

~Alli~

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Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

10 posted 2004-11-01 08:39 PM

Wonderful write, my friend...will be seeking more of yours.

jwesley

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