Open Poetry #34 |
Without Saying the Word......a duet with Dark Angel |
Martie
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Posts 28049California |
` Without Saying the Word Like a small farewell, a forgiving breath, it swells and folds and falls dragging the sand, asking nothing of seashells. A whisper perhaps would sound like this and nudge just so the unspeakable sadness of goodbye. This sea is not only a matter of rivers or the hum of fish, blue and mystical that bite the mouth, with each kiss of light on water I hold my breath and sink into the cobalt cold of doubt, not knowing if I can swim with your arms around me or if you will pull me down or save me, from what remains of this tide inside that sweeps the edge of me subtle. With wave after wave I crash and measure my strength in grains of sand where children are digging fast and the last high tide threatens a castle. It is here, it has arrived between my hands and plays, lets go of the wind loosens the sky from grey, it is endless, in the midst of waves and the crease of horizons tale. East and west the sun rises and sets within this place, a lazy slow movement that sleeps and then wakes, and in between, to breathe is best done slowly, knowing within the waters coming there is something holy. It is huge in its silence, then roars like a storm and rains new meanings, the fine art of unwinding languages, uttered in wavelengths without even saying a word. ------------- Thank you, Maree [This message has been edited by Sunshine (10-29-2004 08:34 PM).] |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
It is here, it has arrived between my hands and plays, lets go of the wind and loosens the sky from grey, it is endless, in the midst of waves and the crease of horizons tale. East and west the sun rises and sets within this place, a lazy slow movement that sleeps and then wakes and in between, to breathe is best done slowly, knowing within the waters coming there is something holy. ~*~ When you two duet, all is holy. Libraried for safe-keeping. write with grace, all others lose face; |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
You blend like kiss and hug....where does one end and the other begin...and why wonder? ...and the unsaid word...no need to say it, if all is said.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this was a smooth and wonderful sail, within the calm azure sea of mind travel Wonderfully written Bravo!!! Love this |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Like a small farewell, a forgiving breath, it swells and folds and falls dragging the sand, it asks nothing of seashells. A whisper perhaps would sound like this and nudge just so the unspeakable sadness of goodbye. This sea is not only a matter of rivers ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ with each kiss of light on water I hold my breath and sink into the cobalt cold of doubt, not knowing if I can swim with your arms around me or if you will pull me down or save me, from what remains of this tide inside that sweeps the edge of me subtle. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ It is here, it has arrived between my hands and plays, lets go of the wind loosens the sky from grey, it is endless, in the midst of waves and the crease of horizons tale. East and west the sun rises and sets within this place, a lazy slow movement that sleeps and then wakes, and in between, to breathe is best done slowly, knowing within the waters coming there is something holy. It is huge in its silence, then roars like a storm and rains new meanings, the fine art of unwinding languages, uttered in wavelengths without even saying a word. ================================= my oh my.... the moth is giddy...... this me girlies is flat out stunning... I knew as soon as I saw the pairing..but was even more awed with the offering... you two captured something very special here... seemless...spellbinding... lovely lovely lovely.... the fine art of unwinding languages yeesssss..you indeed did that... and its exquisite art. Poetry is emotion put into measure. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
what the moth said.. bravo ladies.. bravo |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A whisper perhaps would sound like this and nudge just so the unspeakable sadness of goodbye. ~*~ Oh ladies... melt me... |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Perfect - wonderful blending - Hugs - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
simply terrific - you two write it so very well - Paul |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
My God, this is exquisite! Keeping this one, it is one of the loveliest duets I've read. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Shameless |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
flawless, i'll come back to this when i can pick my jaw up off the floor |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Perfection ladies...absolutely perfect! I do hope to see another duet from you two again real soon. A standing ovation for this beauty! ~Hugs to you both, Nancy~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is more lovely than I could have possibly imagined. Well worth the wait (smile, yes Martie, I've been waiting) *tossing roses to both of you* two kisses too lovely |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Smiling, you guys are great! Thank you for your kind words and your warm approval. And Martie, hehe thank YOU for the fun we had in creating this, you're indeed a wonder and it was a pleasure once again writing with you. Maree and I am haunted |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Like a small farewell, a forgiving breath, it swells and folds and falls dragging the sand, asking nothing of seashells. A whisper perhaps would sound like this and nudge just so the unspeakable sadness of goodbye. Oh I wish I could write this way!!! Your combined beauty astounds me, so much so that I never wanted this to end. So very pretty you two~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
had to come back and inhale all the loveliness of this gem again. outstanding me girlies...truely Poetry is emotion put into measure. |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hey Martie! Woohoo! I love this. You and DarkAngel just put a smile on my face! Bravo! Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
M & M....hehe, ya dun really gud ladies. Yep, an awesome blending, almost too good to tell you apart. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis and Maree~ I keep coming back to this stunning piece, and have finally found voice to tell you both that it writes itself on my heart~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thankyou for the wonderful replies...Maree is much fun to write with...she makes it easy. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
So very special indeed! Martie and Maree .... MARE your names hold it (SEA) so who could do any better than you? Highly enjoyed this wondrous co-creation. Love, Margherita |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOW...what can I say you two, this is perhaps one of the most beautiful, most perfect pieces of poetry I have ever had the privaledge to read. Your voice blend so perfectly that this poem just simply sings!!! Wonderful, simply wonderful Oh, did I say I liked it? |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
When you two write it is flawless, seamless, sort of almost "sensual" if that is possible. It feels like the reader has been stroked on the back of the neck by a lover, does that make any sense? In otherwords, it feels just so damn good, yanno? You think I enjoyed it, you bet I did! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sigh |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I can only echo what everyone else has said. This is stellar! |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
and rains new meanings, the fine art of unwinding languages, uttered in wavelengths without even saying a word. now that was niiiice... **babygirl** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Your voices blend beautifully... seamlessly. *S* And the result is magic. *S* |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I ALMOST missed this....and I am so very glad that I didn't..... what a way to duet ladies!! Very well done! The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Just adding my voice to the chorus In thanks that your verse lies before us I like that you two Give us thoughts to pursue Please write more; you never could bore us. Thanks to Martie and Maree for this lovely thinker. Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Alicia Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 279 |
oh,...what fine stitching, what writing! this is magical, floating,...wow. ~a. |
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myheart Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 160lost in your eyes |
wow ! excellent duet. ~myheart~ |
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