Open Poetry #34 |
Crux |
DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
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Whitening An old shore Decorating Ambition On a barren Flow Of small insular patterns Flowed and ebbed To dirty wet sand To move from Weather Echoing honesty Protection Revenge Or whether One will destroy Or actions Will educate or destroy the whethers Tucked into winds, torrents, loss That will never penetrate The escape After you have the money And have bought you way To whatever Whether unto tidy havens World never enters Nor ends Emanating from essence You identify crux |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
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nicely done... I enjoyed... |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
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Thanks Cpat Hair I read it again several times and even with knowing what I meant when I wrote it, it is still cryptic for me and almost as if I was writing something that wrote words with mine. I need to rewrite this or possibly as a worst case, understand everything I've written. Dave |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I opt for understanding... this inner voice is speaking... you are the conduit. Whether or not it's all about weather... I enjoyed this, Dave... |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
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Sunshine I dont know about the weather or whether but electric is I think making a channel. Dave |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
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I find when some write's are not completely understandable. Most of the time your real close. But like re-entry, if you don't hit it right. You end up reflecting off, traveling in another direction. going deep into our inner thoughts usually requires meanings that most words are just not able to explain properly. That's why a poem like this is so intriguing. Most readers know where you might be going. But more so, they know where you are...and the over-all meaning can be universal. Nice pen here Dave. wayne If nothing is something |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
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Thanks Wayne I'd still by the I knew what I was writing but it came out. Yes I will work on it and words of a second verse are starting to dance, but please dont queue up at the BBC. dave |
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