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the insider's secret to mardi gras:
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the insider's secret to mardi gras: |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Something you must understand: people who don't know take turns dancing with the shadows of the elbows dressed in black & white trained to trail a train of silk they seek a different end than us - they greet each other with a kiss as though they practiced fluttering with a hand-held fan daydream of blushing natural between the fronds of plastic snapped in screen mocking whisper from behind dangling a knot and glossed fringes giggle bells of Saint Mary's she begins to ring the parliament to home, we sing, "Hail Ye Ancient Holy Queen" we free the very hairs upon our chests. Waving resolute we bleed the glory from the pores of need in absolution of ourselves singing "Ave" in the streets as they hose the piss, they play screaming our remorse (of course) as we worship mother's mead washing sins away we seek a better way to die. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (02-08-2005 06:52 AM).] |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
You strung me along and then at the end you slapped me. Quite well done. Oh hey, shouldn't you be asleep or something? It's late.  Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
This reads very well.... The short line form is perfect for the subject, which is gritty but truthful... The title is perfect.... I also like the fine continueity of this, how the first stanza is woven into the last.. Love it! __________ice/ford ><> |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Your words just grab a hold of me and won't let go. Love every one of them. G'nite Gawgeous  sleep well Mxx p.s to the library and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
I knew that just couldn't quite find the words that you used (grin) enjoyed it serene one |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ok, so you made me do it again K, I'm sittin here grinnin. You do know how good you are yes?? You lay your words down with unique style and draw the reader in and wrap it all up tight and right with the perfect endings. I am in awe of you! Brava lady... |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
There's gotta be a better way to die then this....well written gal....think I'll head down yonder next year if I'm still around...need to find a better way... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome write |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
sounds like youve had one too many o, life, ain't it a pip? enjoy the assortment down there |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
they seek a different end than us - ~*~ Your individuality remains intact. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent insiders take on the Mardi Gras. Much enjoyed the read. Love ya lady~ In the midst of winter, |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I was thinking of you this morning... today... knowing you wouldn't be playing tourist... even if you were playing. *S* Enjoy the seek, lady. *S* |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Karen, How is it you consistently make me feel so shallow? LOL Or perhaps it's an IQ thing. When I read you I am so in over my head. Yet...I'm drawn back for more. Bless you sweetie, I do love you so.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I was hoping you'd post something today on Fat Tuesday. Just knew you would, really! I was looking for you as I was watching parades on the news today/night....no luck. Anyhow....the poem made me smile! .....jo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Happy Mardi Gras folks. Thank you all for reading, and special hugs for my buddies Toe, and Larry.  I love you all dearly. And now? I think I'll just say goodnight.  I'm tired. Thanks again for all of your kindness.  |
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