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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal 
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fourteen beats between breaths . . . still sound ecstasy vermillion bled blush at a touch— finger trail tales of the wanton dew pools in shimmer I lay . . . pierced and dying a thousand deaths and rising once more in rebirth only to be pierced again by amour’s arrow s.a.t. btw, Greeneyes, my only problem? -the heart of the inspiration of this poem was a red hot lover that consumed my body in a pink flamed dream -tee hee  If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
LOL...oh Susan...your btw caught me off guard... Well done! |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
LMAO Oh Susan, thank you, you've made my week with this and your comment....  I do hope the dream was good.....  ~~*~~ |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
 had to be woke up from a dream 2 weeks ago, i was screaming ~ s u s a n~ did not know i was but in dream i knew i was, and the really funny part, was on a bed. i dont know any susans, i was going to tell you this on your last reply, but got sidetracked, then when your btw and dream, well i had to get it out of my head. what is really funny, i was visiting my boyfriend, so now i am teased for calling susan and his name aint sue roflmao |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
I have Ambien if you want to get that red hot lover back Susan! LOL! Love this poem...it just makes me...sigh! What can I say? It makes even me...swoon! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Sunshine - Greeneyes - glad you could chuckle at my funny Thanks ladies - Marsha - you crack me up - tee hee - thanks for sharing - that is some weird dream  EV2 - mmmm - nighty night  - lol - thanks dear -Hugs - Susan If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
admiring this one much Lady...and smiling. Challenge well met.  |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you kindly dear lady -  SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
You are always an inspiration to read dear lady~ ~ARh |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
some people have all the luck everytime I shoot some hottie with an arrow they just quiver a bit then ignore me pout |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thanks ARH for your sweet reply Dark - ROFL - you have to use the right arrow, silly - the aluminum ones tend to do that Hugs - Susan If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
dew pools in shimmer Your choice of words is exceptionally captivating. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Great write Susan! ~Alli~ *AIM = Alli4000* Journal! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you both most kindly, Margherita and Alli - you are dear  SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
At least he wasn't wearing the tea shirt. I supposed that came afterwards. Nice evocative stuff. Dave |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
tee hee - Dave thank you SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
This is one hot poem, Susan! (a nice one to read right before hitting the sack!) Sweet dreams... misc'e |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
the poem is wonderful Susan, and those responses just made my day~~~ smiling M |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Not only did I enjoy reading your poem, I got a kick out of your comment to Greeneyes at the bottom of it! lol  Linda |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you my friends - am glad you enjoyed. I just had to slip in all those words that were taboo for the poem - it was fun - good Saturday morning all SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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