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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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some thing I just can't think about - me - who cannot seem to cease the thinks from standing there in line to board the rollercoaster me as the cart screams dangerous in the curve ahead I plead: "plant your feet and pray" for we are riding on one rail. some things I dare not think about - me - who never ceases dream the brink of all raw edge despair tightening elastic string calculating height and mass devil-wing the depth I weep: "loose your feet and pray" for we have left no room to fail. something I won't care about - me - who cannot stop the tears I blink the waters of the tide behind the levee of my lids sandbag of the scars I sigh: "take a chance and pray" for we don't have much else to do. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (02-01-2005 04:32 AM).] |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Wow - this is amazing and holding so much truth too. Makes one think even though we don't care to. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"loose your feet and pray" for we have left no room to fail. me thinks too much too. But, me thinks you think on things that need to be thought about! Truly, you share the solution in the ocean of this poem which hits us in swelling waves of tight rhythmic pattern, reflecting just how life feels right now. Those waves do bring us to our knees.  ....jo |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
umm, WOW! library Mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Karen: to board the rollercoaster me as the cart screams dangerous in the curve ahead I plead: "plant your feet and pray" for we are riding on one rail. I have never heard this described quite so "right there" before. I saw this, and you and geez, too much thinking makes us sick but I cannot help but DO anything but. I should also stop listening to that other self of mine, the one that leaps without thinking all the time. The one that looks back at me, grinning and laughing, flying through the air while I am standing there with a broom and dustpan, exhausted. This is one of my favorites from you because it just bleeds and it is beauty and so are you. And I know this more than you realize. *prayers, K* Susie |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I know this... oh yea... I do. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what an ending *damn* |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
A slick pathed, dangerous balancing act. Enjoyed your insomniac post. Poets against the war is redundant |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Awesome writing! Eric |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you all for being so gracious --I prolly edited this one to ruin as I really WAS thinking too much. sigh I twirl my hair when I do that too. You ever twirl your hair with a tiara on your head? (I suggest not) I almost had to cut my hair to remove it from those little combs. So folks, the bets are on, will Karen survive another carnival season?  ow. Thanks for reading.  *hic* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen "something I won't care about - me - who cannot stop the tears I blink the waters of the tide behind the levee of my lids sandbag of the scars I sigh:" You are one of the finest people I know...for many reasons, only one of them is the way you think!  |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Karen...All I can say is I am touched by the depth of this and the shear honesty of your heart and your poetry...Paul Stay away from Jackson Square...Too many drunks are there.LOL ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
you think quite...impressive |
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