Open Poetry #34 |
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Pirouette . . . choka |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass ![]() |
The slow drum of days, rhythm of the turning moon, dance of the seasons slowly speeding to a whirl; blind, I would see them, deaf, I would hear the swift years racing in a blur, breathless..... [This message has been edited by Ratleader (01-30-2005 12:07 AM).] |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This leaves the reader knowing that last word intimately! *S* To say this is beautiful is an understatement... Spectacular work!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed And the beat goes on and on and on......like the tide. ![]() |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Excellent - the words, the title - enjoyed ![]() If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
it's quite sad, I see it, too |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
there are days I want to make it stand still...for a month or so |
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*Alli4000*![]()
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow...Great write!! ![]() ~Alli~ *AIM = Alli4000* Journal! |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
THIS IS BEAUTIFUL ED.....BUT FYI TANKA HAS ONLY 5 LINES ![]() |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ooh, that is true, a mental typo....it's Choka...those can have a hundred lines or more....I go see if title change will take.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh this is good I couldn't even attempt this form |
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