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Cpat Hair

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0 posted 2005-01-16 07:04 PM

I poured myself three fingers
And sat where I could watch her skin
As it trapped clouds in the brittle she embraced
In the red cold of evening
                   This late January day
That found the air spiced with oak
  Green burned by those who had not cut their own

I wondered as old oak spilled down my throat
  If the way she closed her eyes to the sun
Made her colder than even the bare few degrees
Mercury showed in his glass
But knew my hands were too old now
  To dip them into the chill and not have them ache
Far longer and deeper than they did
    When I too was filled with adventure

My eyes would not close nor would my heart
So another 3 were dazzling amber in my glass
   As I stared empty eyed
In an echo of coyote yelps that called brethren
  To come share the cold repast
         Of this the winter’s beast

Knowing somewhere
    Skin was warmer than hearts
   And hearts were warmer than her
Who trapped the  clouds in ice

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2005-01-16 07:07 PM

Sir, you've had many "bests" of poems...
THIS...

seems to top 'em all.

But I know you'll fool me,
and do it yet again.

And...

just hush.

MGROVES

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california

2 posted 2005-01-16 07:11 PM

enjoyed

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2005-01-16 07:19 PM

"trapped the clouds in ice "

sending warmth...

Martie

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4 posted 2005-01-16 07:23 PM

Ron

"My eyes would not close nor would my heart" That's because you see with your heart.

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

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Florida

5 posted 2005-01-16 07:31 PM

"Knowing somewhere
    Skin was warmer than hearts
   And hearts were warmer than her
Who trapped the  clouds in ice"

it's cold over here too.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

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Moved from a shack to a barn

6 posted 2005-01-16 07:32 PM

Jack'll be fine, thanks.

Mind if I join ya?

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

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South Carolina, USA

7 posted 2005-01-16 07:46 PM

You could definitely start a lonely hearts
club with this one...

Excelente...well done Ron.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

8 posted 2005-01-16 10:17 PM

I echo Kari's every word...

Mxx

all I can taste is this moment, all I can breathe is your life, cause sooner or later it's over, I just don't want to miss you tonight.~GooGooDolls~

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03

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Forever In Your Heart

9 posted 2005-01-16 11:39 PM

I would love it so, if I could be just half the poet you are!

~Love and Hugs
~ARH

Come,love all of me, mind, body, spirit..feel my passion, taste of me, be filled completely!

passing shadows
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displaced

10 posted 2005-01-17 05:18 AM

*in awe*

suthern

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Louisiana

11 posted 2005-01-24 12:36 PM

I wondered as old oak spilled down my throat
  If the way she closed her eyes to the sun
Made her colder than even the bare few degrees
Mercury showed in his glass
But knew my hands were too old now
  To dip them into the chill and not have them ache
Far longer and deeper than they did
    When I too was filled with adventure

Yowser. *S* I never realize just how much I miss your words... until I get to read them again. *S* Then... I sit speechless. *S*

Midnitesun

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Gaia

12 posted 2005-01-24 12:52 PM

amazing imagery
"the air spiced with oak
Green burned by those who had not cut their own"
and having chopped my fair share of woodpiles in Alaska, I could smell this scene, though it was never oak I burned at that latitude

*Alli4000*

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The World of Poetry

13 posted 2005-01-24 07:32 PM

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

wandering glider
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aloft

14 posted 2005-01-24 07:36 PM

after this
I think I'll take it straight up
tonight
and skip the icy cubes . . .

enjoyed

glider

Juju
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In your dreams

15 posted 2005-01-24 08:08 PM

Thats an awsome poem. Reminds me of me. I am not bad though, just arigant and nieve

Juju

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

icebox
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in the shadows

16 posted 2005-01-25 10:32 PM

I seem to miss too many good poems here. This one is wonderful! Glad it bounced up again!!!

I hope there's some of that Jack left, my headache is almost gone.

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