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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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You display the things that you want me to see while speaking of a lovers melody, and hold me captive under your wings, without allowing me to fly Protecting me but yet, not willing to try or perhaps it's your way of keeping whats real hidden from my eyes. The feast is on the tables been set so keep carving layers you haven't devoured me yet. The greatest beauty on earth, is found in the hearts of those who love.... |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Wonderful write! Enjoyed. JL |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
So many children think that, especially as they are guided to achievement by parents not ability or in reverse that have ability but a parent has decided they are only good for breeding and living off a man. To have ability, be given the chance to demonstrate must be one of the nicest things there is. Excellent words. Dave |
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MyHeartofShadows Member
since 2004-09-04
Posts 88Hyattsville, MD |
This poem is no Turkey, sorry couldn’t resist, your way with words brings complex thoughts to simple understanding. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Excellent, little one... concise, well thought out... the meaning is clear. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
well written! Rf |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Donna - your poetry carries such power - such poignancy - truly a pen with some muscle yet still dripping eloquence  SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Great write! I just have to tell you again how muhc i like the new pic!  ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Donna, simply superb. Sad, how they sometimes cannot let the bird fly, even for a second...in fear of it nevr returning. When love is there...the dove always comes back to the nest... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Donna, this is powerful and touching in the same time. Perfectly penned. Love, Margherita |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
as the others say yes it is powerful and all should be able to fly independently to reach ones purpose ones destiny instead of codependent to ease ones fear of being alone or not needed not allowing real love to grow and spread it wings and fly or having the ability to do and be ones self or knowing the ability to be proud of giving love and growth and encouriging flight of independece knowing love always comes back thanks  and hugs |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
  Have missed reading you! ~~*~~ |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...very powerful! Eric |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
sounds all too familiar these circumstances, and succinctly expressed in few words |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Loved the last line especially... dinner isn't over until dessert! TD |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"you haven't devoured me yet" and don't let them!!! nicely written Donna! "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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