Open Poetry #34 |
She turned and followed |
jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
Crushed underfoot trampled and soiled by the Tempter- ruined enough that he thought to forget her. Deafened by the din of crowded footsteps, she had joined the many on a path wide enough to take them there. She couldn’t hear Him softly, persistently calling; her heart was tied tight by her choice of direction. Soft spoken and undemanding, He waited. With naught but a frightful finish ahead, hope was not dead, but it was certainly lost and uncared for. Struggling, the waysides presented meager support against the forward pull. Unexpected silence snuck in swirling standstill around her feet, and then the sound her soul most longed for, He called her by name. She turned and followed. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Unexpected silence snuck in swirling standstill around her feet, and then the sound her soul most longed for, He called her by name. She turned and followed." Beautiful JB...I have missed reading you. Hugs~Nancy In the midst of winter, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Wow gal, this one speaks to me... I feel its depth, see it's layers and it is so very beautiful and done perfectly. So good to see you here again, I miss your shine. Hugs. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you ladies, I have missed writing, but aparently my muse and I do not share the same sentiments *shrug* |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
and then the sound her soul most longed for, He called her by name. ~*~ You've been away much too long... Welcome home. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you lady, between work, and having to beg and borrow a laptop to access PIP, and my muse's stubborn resistance, it has been easier to stay away, but man oh man have I missed being here |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
With naught but a frightful finish ahead, hope was not dead, but it was certainly lost and uncared for. Struggling, the waysides presented meager support against the forward pull. Unexpected silence snuck in swirling standstill around her feet, and then the sound her soul most longed for, He called her by name. She turned and followed. whoa, this was intoxicating stuff here lady I'm going back for another read... |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Hi ya 'bellyjeans'...how in the world are ya?...Howz them legs?....yall take care now ya hear? |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Such a pleasure to read this on a rainy afternoon ...... or anytime for that matter. Hugs, Chris ~The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Excellent! Very nice read. JL |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Great write! ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I've missed your writing! |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
A stunning write that leaves you rooted to the spot as you read each powerful word again...Wonderful writing... |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Absolutely love it! Bravo jellybeans. It is so great to read you tonight. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ooooooooh.....great write, jellybeans! ....jo |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
excellant |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I had to come back for another dive...this was truly amazing, and sending you back to the top so everyone can read...and experience this wonder |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
and then the sound her soul most longed for, He called her by name. She turned and followed. Your muse may have been snoozing for a while... but when she wakes, she gives gems!! This is beautiful, my friend... *S* |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you all so much, I really had no idea this would be so well received...and sughtern, I think this is why mu muse was so quiet, this one was needing to be written and I could wirte no other til it was out...thank you for liking it |
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