Open Poetry #34 |
Who Speaks the Mind of Soul? |
LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Mists of war so intimate Like comrades come and go Of carnages and loneliness Who speaks the mind of soul? Eyes of fundamentalists Assembling ideological skills In human situations Masked by control Of hallucinating miseries One’s that I adore Allow me my deformity The bard of lowest depths The very human side of me Which rarely wins or triumphs I’ll past the cultivating elements To all losses in life’s time Saving all the textures The dwelling places mine I am this earthly mud and dirt Dusting off the notebook Of self annihilation Randomly coercing workbook By history and forces of nature Sometimes a night watch, helpful An inconsistent human With glimpses of redemption A snob, nailing closed, my very own coffin While dark forces give permission Toasting thumbs up & tied behind their backs With photogenic wisecracks Awakening to my personal life And all that lies beyond I’ve come into a time Where dangers do no harm I am a calculated menace A steady playing briefness Of what lies beyond our reach Life’s personal, soul to teach I stumble, crushing gentleness Compassion and decency Taking on a new face Of a calculated dream Ruthless will, turns grief to balm A little more powerful A little more humble A little more insightful Walking straight into the void Ahhhhh yes, Mists of war so intimate Like comrades come and go Of carnages and loneliness Who speaks the mind of soul~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
adee do (grin) out here in cali, they have an irritating commercial about some plumbing company Adee..they ask several questions about who can do this and who can do that..and to each the reply Adee Do..thus the comment.. enjoyed you lady friend |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You know, Lee, the first two lines of each stanza make up another poem in and of itself... an intrinsic look at humanity and its ways... Well done! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LeeJ You have grown a forest of incite Back to the base of white. enjoyed Good morning love. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Fantastic write - yes, that's it - "fantastic". Perhaps the will, the "ruthless" will is the true essence of our being that joins and keeps alive body, soul/mind. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
“Ruthless will, turns grief to balm A little more powerful A little more humble A little more insightful Walking straight into the void Ahhhhh yes, Mists of war so intimate Like comrades come and go Of carnages and loneliness Who speaks the mind of soul~” ........... Ahhhhh yes! You have such insight into humanity, and the almost placid way we all are at times conjoined in perceptions and misconceptions of what we truly should be concerned about. I thank you for the reminder. And, for your philosophy class 101. So enjoyed this read. JL |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Sunshine is right, you have two poems here Lee, and both are great! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
LeeJ Amazing thought and wisdom words in this....just a wonderful poem! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
A little more powerful A little more humble A little more insightful Walking straight into the void Ahhhhh yes, aahhhh yes, i agree in complete accord you pack a lot of homespun wisdom and philosophy in these humble creations |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Lee ... I just love reading through your thoughts , you truly are fascinating Hope |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
JL already took what I copied to quote very good write |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Whenever I pop in to PiP I always try and read your poems. This one is a real gem. hugs, Marti A single sunbeam is enough to drive away many shadows. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Full of insight and beautifuly written. A rare combination. Eric |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
This is so nicely written LeeJ! ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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