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inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
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0 posted 2005-01-01 10:59 PM



Cry no more
little cloud

follow the trail
of tears
to battered fields,
where your reflection
exhibits hope
in the name
of love's
restitution,

and lay free
your woes
on the rise of
white dandelions

crowning through
the deluge,
in a shrine
for the flower
children.


** for a fellow poet, for the tsunami victims
   for the clouds that feel the guilt of
   their overflow **


[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (01-02-2005 11:05 AM).]

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EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279

1 posted 2005-01-01 11:02 PM


Mmmm I rarely stop in to read you inkedgoddess. Glad I decided to peak today. Loved this. Jealous I did not write it.
Snow
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desert flower looking for rain
2 posted 2005-01-01 11:15 PM


oh.... the image of the white dandelions... i'm thinking of when they start to go to seed.... how they're about to be sent into the wind....

oh my gosh this actually just gave me a shiver.... so deep the emotion went through me.

"so I wait for you like a lonely house
till you will see me again and live in me.
Till then my windows ache"
p.neruda

Susan
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walking the surreal
3 posted 2005-01-02 12:50 PM


A delicate, heart write - and I love that opening, cry no more little cloud -

  Susan

Every action generates a force that returns to us in like kind . . . let us choose compassion and love

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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4 posted 2005-01-02 01:43 AM


Michele, I so admire your writing and the way you view the world!  Happy New Year!   ....jo
passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2005-01-02 05:23 AM


I love this
Dark Stranger
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6 posted 2005-01-02 08:20 AM


nice woman stuff inky
soft heart
and intentional eyes

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
7 posted 2005-01-02 08:27 AM


inkedgoddess
A lovely write a warm ray of light.

*Alli4000*
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The World of Poetry
8 posted 2005-01-02 04:15 PM


I'm speechless.

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
9 posted 2005-01-02 07:54 PM


Angel breath seemed to guide the heart here.
Happy New Year...
TD

Midnitesun
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Gaia
10 posted 2005-01-02 08:59 PM


what a beautiful write, sister ink
vandana
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11 posted 2005-01-03 11:07 AM


nice write
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
12 posted 2005-01-03 12:50 PM


follow the trail
of tears
to battered fields,
where your reflection
exhibits hope
in the name
of love's
restitution,

Really nice, and so beautiful, you~

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
13 posted 2005-01-03 12:54 PM



Michele, your post-script is
as beautiful as the poem itself...

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